You are the writer and I am the reader. You are trying to entice me into reading your story; you are trying to prove that your story doesn’t suck. With the foremost basics of writing stated, what in the hell would give you a reason to put the second in a little 'what if pokemon couldn't evolve' bunch of stories. The first is Magikarp and Gyarados, which explains why this is happening.] as your description for this story? Additionally, there should be a comma after Charmeleon; basic systematic mechanics of commas. The only reason I am venturing into this story is because I have a fervent obsession for Charmanders.[today we will have another talk about pokemon and what was their evolutionary tree
Wrong tense; if these Pokemon are going to be shown, ie are living and breathing as the announcer speaks, then it would be is. These Pokemon aren’t extinct, so there is no reason to use a past tense on an existing evolutionary tree.[In the second, and angry charmeleon raged.
Really? Proof-read your work. This story is barely long and you can’t even catch all the errors?[All three fire pokemon were at the very low level of five, each one a newly hatched pokemon.
If your going to make a story about Pokemon, could you at least conform to the ways of it’s technicalities? Secondly, you fail to make any amount of sense with this phrase. The announcer is discussing this evolutionary change, therefore detonating that Charmelon and Charizard are later forms of Charmander. In result, it is not feasible for Charmelon and Chrizard to be ”newly hatched eggs“.

I also do have a problem with the movement of this story. To put it simply, it was boring and dull. You have three of the most popular fire Pokemon and you failed to execute any amount of spontaneity or fun into this little seminar.

This IS the CrystalSakura who's been reviewing you a lot lately, but I'm too lazy to sign in today. o_0 ... Very deep and well thought-out. So not only are you the MASTER of all angst fics, you're also very smart. Keep writing!

u act like the chars are weak THEY ARE NOT WEAK CHARIZARDS ARE THE STRONGEST AND CHARAMDNDERS ARE NOT FAILURES sends out charmander and beats up arceus hmph too borin

somethings wrong with you.

another nice fic. this series isn't as dark as most of your fics. thats good because too many of one type of fic can get boring.

I like these little... whateveryoucallems. And... you should do one on the eevee evolutions!

Hmm ... weird. Very interesting POV you have on the issue. ... very strange ... *thinks about it, toddling off*

*tears welling* No.. ... ... This can't be happening... Charmander... weak? *stood straight, beating his chest* Charmanders are anything but weak! They have the intellect! See how many times Charmander had won battles for Ash versus the number of times Charmeleon and Charizard let him down due to their arrogance... plus the fact that Charizard got his head stuck to the pipe. If brain overpowers the brawn, I'm sure Charmander will win! Charmanders 4Eva!

Okay, that was sweet. I have never heard anyone go that in depth about any kind of Pokemon, especially not the Charmander, Charmeleon, Charizard bunch. You put things into an all new light for me. Muchos gracias, senorita! Adios!

A bit dull this fic. But ignore Alex; Charizard is weak against Electric attacks because it's half-Flying, and you didn't say they couldn't breathe fire EVER, you said their cages were built so they couldn't breathe fire whilst in them (because then people would die). So Alex is just being dumb.

wow! I LOVE this series!

VERY NICE! I really like this series, it's very interesting. I do have a question, though: Is Gyarados the only super-powerful pokemon that taking over the world? What happened to Dragonite, Tyranitar, Alakazam, all three of them extremely powerful pokemon that evolve from weak original forms? Those pokemon would be very interesting to write about. (partially because A) Tyranitar is a Dark type, so that's right up your alley, B) generally, very few fics are written about these pokemon, especially Tyranitar, and, to be selfish, C) Asides from Gyarados, Tyranitar and Dragonite are one of my favorites!) hehehe. I can't wait to see more in this series, it gives me my daily 'what-if' fix. BaiBai!

If they couldn't breath fire then their tail flame would go out and they would DIE.

harizard is weak against any pokemon who can use electric attacks.

fire isn't weak against eletristy, I know this from experience.
The natural world balances itself out, it is it's nature.

An entire species dieing off... almost like our world, except there are no evolved forms to help preserve the dwindling numbers of endangered species today. Though, if one species died out, how would it affect other species. Without the rivalries with Charmander, Charmeleon would over popualte and end up killing themselves. Makes you think, huh?