Very well written and I like the plot so far :P
Can't wait for the next chapter ^^

I like this. Fresh plot. (:

Curious to know what Sasuke's up to. Keep it up ^^

I think your story is developing nice, but this chapter looks pretty short to me. Not because the amount of words, but because you didn't developed enough plot in it to look like a full chapter. It seems that the plot is still "frozen". I still don't have a clue about Sasuke's character and where to want to go with your story.

Though, rather nice story, I enjoy this very much. Thank you for publishing.

Short indeed, but I still enjoyed. I got really happy when I saw you had updated :) You split a chapter in two?
Hm, I got a bit confused with Sasuke's intentions. And I'm curious to know more about Kakashi's relationship with Sasuke. Orochimaru is always a nice character to appear also...

(I'm even more curious to when Itachi appear again...:D)

I really hope you update as soon as you can :)

Interesting. Nicely written, very well developed plot. This appears to be the beginning of a very good story. Good job.

hm nice but now i wonder whats orochimaru role in all of this when itachi is there and why sasuke is whoring himself out

Is Sasuke whoring himself?
I like it that you're trying a very realistic plot on this, even using real world business language, it always makes the story more coherent and interesting.
I'm not really a fan of KakaSasu but I'll go with that:)

I really enjoyed this chapter, though I didn't quite understand how Sasuke and Itachi met in here. I suppose they don't live together. You made Sasuke'ss revenge seem so ironic and pitiful, especially with an evil Itachi to make things worst...very interesting:D

o_o That was hot, Itachi seems so cruel... but then again, it fits him well - in a way. Please continue!

well... I have a thing for historical context (I have a Naruto Historical club on y-gal) so I'm not a good person to ask that...

I like the chapter, dark as I see the Uchihas... me likes ^^

interesting story.

Also there are parts in the story where switched from third person to first person pov/narrate. Like this one part

"The broken boy’s mind seemed to die right there. Suddenly his back hit the perfectly clean floor. The body of the oldest man was now above my own, pressing hard against his groin. One of his hands over my chest, the other one closing over his throat, almost cutting the air supply to his lungs which he had no doubt would happen given the case, and his lip"

I liked it... :D:D