This has got to be one of my favorite stories. You've done a wonderful job in writing this and I hope that you get to writing the third part soon; I look forward to it). I absolutely love how you placed Musiko into the story as someone extremely cleaver, but not overly noticed as she doesn't put much input on the case but still her words are considered important. I also like how you thought of the shinigami being unable to tell a fake Death Note from a real one by only looking at it. You also portray each of the original characters every well, barely changing much about them, and I absolutely love the connection between Ryuk and Musiko when they were talking about how interesting the final scene/turn out of the case will be

Aw, that's too bad, the thing about people badgering you through your PMs. Anyhow, I think I should see this third installment. Maybe you'll have gotten better since then and now. Godspeed!(PS: I have my own L/OC story, if you're looking for something new to read. I find that reading other people's material helps to bolster my own style, without necessarily meaning to copy others. The writing style can be influenced, but it should be something of your own making, ultimately. I finished it a while ago, but I've been cranking out a caboodle of companion fics since then.)

Hey, you're alive! When I noticed how old these were, and how they were the only two fanfics under your name, I didn't imagine that you'd answer back so quickly. Thanks!
Oh, I see. Unreliable convictions. I guess what threw me off was that Nyoko wasn't punished for her actions, not even by L. At least, not in either of the first two stories. I'm under the impression that there'll be a third installment. Will there be?
I do love L/OC myself. Have written my own material regarding it. I just get picky about how it's done, I suppose.(Hate to spam your review page, but I couldn't send you a PM. You seem to have disabled that function.)

Oh. More more thing that really chafed me: your use of italics or bolding. I understand the device of emphasizing words or phrases to make your dialogue seem more lively, but you shouldn't bold or italicize every five random words in every sentence of every chapter. It's not good for the eyes, and it makes the characters sound funny in my head. And not in a good way.
And (this is just me), it makes your style give me the impression that its writer is arrogant. No, I'm not calling you arrogant, per se, but your abuse of the italics and bolding gives that impression.

Well, I do like your style. It's cleaner than most styles I've seen on here, proper spelling and grammar. But it's a little dry, and doesn't have a lot of depth. A little, but not quite enough.
And the overall concept was pretty cliche, too. Some girl with a Death Note has three guys fall in love with her and changes the course of the "game," just so L can live. I dunno, I guess I'm one of those types that believes that L must die. They must BOTH die, really, him and Light. Or else, the story is not complete.
It sort of cracked me up that you conveniently boosted Mello and Near's ages in order to make pairing Nyoko with Near less squick-ish, if I can call it that. What's more, her whole spiel about not acting as Kira even with all of the Death Notes in her possession...it doesn't matter why she killed Light and all (namely, to save L). This doesn't make her any different than Misa or Light. She killed for her own selfish reasons and feels no remorse for it. She HAS become a Kira. I'm shocked that the task force didn't arrest her, much less L (who probably should've, if for the sole reason of convincing her that he didn't love her).
And I really don't Near would be any better than L as a lover. He'd most likely be just as bad, if not worse.
PS: It's not recommended that you add profiles in your story. Or spoilers. Let the writing speak for itself. After all, charrie profiles imply that you already have a clear concept of them, when writing is actually quite fluid.

I can't help but to review this chapter because from what I've read, Musiko already has the Shinigami eyes. So she's supposed to know that Near has a Death Note, as well as Higuchi. Aside from that mistake, I like the story...

thankyou for this story. I loved it. It was well written. Please come out with the 3rd part of this series soon. Please? And does she ever get to be with '? I hope so.(

There had better be a sequel for this.

And more smut.

I seriously did not believe she would end up with Near after this entire debacle.

And when did she sleep with Light?

Loved the story by the way)

Hey, just wondering when you'll have the next installment up, if at all. I hope you're proud, I signed up to just to ask you that. Of the stories I've read so far (and I only read completed ones..) the first two installments of the AoD series are best. At least they manage to keep things interesting... Keep writing and don't be too disheartened by lack of reviews. There are plenty of people like myself who're just too lazy to let you know they like it.

well, now I just HAVE to know what happens next! PLEASE post the next installment.

that is so sad. i could not believe he told her he did not love her. well at least Nate Rivers...near gets her after all he did for her..hell he killed for her. i still believe Lawliet can find love. *sniffs* I am super glad the bastards got what they deserved ..poor Misa she was used. happy new years!

Please don't kill him. please.I love Lawliet hello my name. She is so confused by come on please stay with Lawliet and kill Misa and Light. UPDATE SOON! Happy new year!

Great song at the end. ;op. I love that she came up with the plan simply genius. ;op I love it and glad now she has two notebooks. ;op UPDATE SOON! Happy holidays!

Poor stupid Misa. I can;t help but feel bad for her being a tool. I am glad Ryuk returned. i like him for comic relief. Musiko i is a genius that is for sure. I should make a Hall of Shame. hilarious. Poor Near. UPDATE SOON!

I've been keeping up with this story, because I love it. It's so fun to read, and you write very well.

And if takes reviews for you to continue writing, then that's you.
But I gotta say, if you're only writing this story and sharing it for reviews then you ARE wasting your time and effort.
I mean, if that's your only reason for posting then maybe you should rethink why you're writing in the first place.
And reviews are absolutely not required to see how many people are reading your stories. That's what Story Traffic is for.
If all your traffic counters remain at 0, then maybe I could understand your gripe and your holding updates hostage. But for reviews? Man I'm sorry, but that's a little tacky in my opinion.
Just look at your traffic. And don't get pushy about the reviews. It's not cool. Please don't be offended this is just what I feel.