It's lovely. :) I didn't read this with anyone in mind, actually, but I liked it better that way: the anonymity of the characters makes it feel a little like what they had together belongs only to /them/, not the world (going with the "quiet and peaceful" thing). And I liked the foreshadowing--how the parentheses parallel the events of the story more and more as you read on.

Nice work!

(Also glad to know you're not too bothered about my AWOL. And the (ex)boyfriend sounds like the typical common-senseless guy; don't feel especially pathetic over it. :33)

This is really beautifully written. I love the way you word things- I can really sense the emotion, or see the visual. You're an amazing writer! Keep it up. (:

I really liked the poetic repetition of "bright and beautiful." Since you use it as a refrain, though, I think it would have been better not to use "beautiful" throughout the rest of the story. Too much repetition lessens the impact.

Just something to consider or dismiss with my best wishes. :)

This is just lovely. I love the line "there is nothing overly magical about their relationship".

Oh my, this is beautiful! So well written! I love every line! Your best work! Though I'm sorry for the reason you came up with this (don't let him hurt you!).

This is sweet, but really sad!
Well done.
That sucks about the guy who broke up with you, hope you feel better soon.