Aw, kawaii! *squee!* Well, stories are what they make of themselves. It's not bad that yours took on its own personality. Although I do sympathize with you, it's frustrating when that happens because you realize that you're not really the one in control... stories are mysterious things indeed.

I thought it was quite good.

Hoping inspiration finds you well,
Ember

This was a good story and it was short and sweet. It wasn't boring either.

#Teary eyed# So sad... So amazing... #Brightens# Oh, and he got it after. When Danna 'died'. ^^

Golden-chan! Two MAR fanfics in a day?! My heart's so happy :D
FALALALALALALAALALA *little dance of joy*

This was sweet, but... uh... angsty. (i couldnt find a better word)
I think that your uh... (omg i forgot) implied NanaAl fic was nicer :D JYJY ( something like ganbate, but in chinese. JiayouJiayou.) on writing better fics! :D

~Kura