Heya Mika here, wow that was a turn of events and I cannot believe that Tyson has been spreading rumours about her just cause she didn't kiss him back. And what was he even doing kissing her if he had a girlfriend. Well I guess we'll find out more and see what happens in the next chapter. I liked this chapter and cannot wait to see what happens next. XXMikaXX

oh i have the urge to punch kyoko out! poor ashley! ill kill tyson too if i had too! keep going!

Heya Mika here, those were great two chapters I really liked them. OMG I wasn't expecting Tyson to kiss her, well I was but I wasn't if that makes sense, if it doesn't never mind. But I wonder how that boads for her and Kai. Well I think she's gonna choose Kai cause she has a crush on him anyways but I can't wait to see what happens next. Keep up the fantastic work and please update soon. XXMikaXX

Hm... I wasn't going to make this assumption without reading more of your story, but I've read enough. Your character is a Mary-Sue, plain and simple. Please let me explain exactly why your character is considered a Sue.

1. Everyone likes her. At first, it seemed as if Tyson would be annoyed by her (which is reasonable just look at Hilary). Then it turns out he is in love with her? Oh, but wait! There's more! Kai absolutely loves her as well? Way to make everyone EXTREMELY OOC... Let me tell you, Kai would NOT act like this. He is not the type of person who goes around and kisses/protects a random girl (much less one he just met)! Also, you can be sure that absolutely no one will like some girl that acts like she's better that everyone.

2. OOC. Look at the above.
3. Personality. She acts like a typical Sue, "Oh, I prefer to wear black and red! I would never wear something girly! Eww!
Why do Sue's find "girly" clothing so horrible? Oh, and most people would find her clothes to be rather indecent (example:Short tight black dress).

3. Her eyes change color. This is all you need to call her a Sue.

I apologize if I sounded rude by stating my thoughts, but I am simply trying to help you understand that Mary-Sues are not likable. I hope you use this to help you in the future.
Here is something to help you understand Mary Sues better (or you could just take a Mary Sue Litmus /Main/MarySue

If you have already done any of the above (which I highly doubt) please disregard it.

Thank you and good luck.

lol keep going! its getting good!

woohoo nice!

dang tyson is having anger management issues keep going!

Heya Mika here, this was a great chapter. Abit tense at the beginning but as it ended all was happy. I thought that it was funny that when she lost the ability to think right and her brain wasn't complying with her thoughts that 'that' was what she came out with. I burst out laughing. Oh and I'm sorry for the late review but I've been having a tough time with my computer, it got a virus and then we were away over New Year so this is me just getting back on track. Keep up the fantastic work and please update

P.S Happy New Year and all the best for 2009!

LOVE IT!

Heya Mika here, well this is certainly getting interesting huh? I cannot wait to see how this story pans out. Keep up the fantastic work and please update

Heya Mika here, this seems like an interesting story and I cannot wait to see what happens next. Keep up the great work and please update