I just read the end of this chapter. WTF, Forte fighting himself? Last time I checked, in the American version of , Forte's name was Bass. *snicker
So... "Bass", as you call him, has to fight himself TWICE?

You make so little sense, it's hilarious.

And yeah, being drug around like a water ski and then getting sliced in half is quite a way to go... "Scyphozoa harder to pronounce than Greek and Japanese combined.

NO! NOT THE AMERICAN NAME!

No, seriously, I find it hard to think of calling somebody as evil as Forte by the name "Bass" without laughing my ass off. It's so unfitting for somebody like him. I think it would've been better referring to him as Forte, since Bass ruins all the tension, unless you look at the other characters' points of view. But that's hard to pull off, so every time his American name is mentioned, I shall continue to laugh.

I love how you made Bass character the right character. I like pyscho Bass. I hope you will update really soon. Please!

O.O It's great! I like this version much more than the first, is more elaborate, and it is really incredible (and much better) the way he enters Lyoko Forte, and I love the part where save Aelita from the tentacles of this monster weak and idiot P I like the second chapter, especially the part where Bass said:"If I knew where I was, Then why would I be asking you?*w* Forte-sama is so cool XD. Congratulations really is a great re-write, I hope the next chapters soon. You are a great writer. ;D

Hmm, I see what you're saying now about the rewrite. As much as I like the idea of Bass pwning anything that gets into his way, you're right that he's too uber for any non Blue Bomber or Serenade character, and that can hurt the story...on a separate note, how will this affect the two sequels? Is the third going to be put on hold until you get to a point where you can edit it to keep it consistent with the rewrite? Or will you continue with it as it already is?

Hmm...a rewrite? I had thought that the original had been good as it was...your new opening is certainly different, but for some reason it feels lacking in comparison to the original first chapter, before the Lyokians show up in this one anyways. I liked the bit with Odd kicking Bass to see if he was dead. It seems very in-character for him.

You'll want to explain what happened and how Bass ended up where he was when Odd kicked him.

All in all, I expect that you'll be able to make this even better than the original if that's what you're aiming for.