girl thats not cheesy! its great.. your right everyone can improve.. i don't have many stories written myself but i have favorites.. go to pacman4851's fanfiction account and check them out thx!

Aw. This makes me smile. It'a about time Mike gets some love, too!

Will you be continuing this?

i luved that story. you really r nice. 4 once mike got wat he wanted. i kind of feel bad 4 edward.

ugh blasphemy!

caring but evil
a dangerous combo

but really mike newton! grody

~Team Edward!~

Mike's a good person and he deserves to be happy at least once. If Stephenie wouldn't give him a chance. Someone should, hence we're we fans and our writing comes in. I love this. Write More.

AW I LOVE IT! so cute u should do more of these anyway love it alot
unlike most i loved mike first i feel sorry for him
still love him but i knew he was never the right one for bella
he is the high school guy ever one wants but thats all he is just so high school.
anyway go team NEWTON
but im also TEAM SWITZERLAND!

haha, aww, I do feel sorry for Mike sometimes XD
and yay, another 13 year old! There doesn't seem to be many of us :)