I loved this! This was amazing!

okay, this is awsome. Are you going to do Cragen next?

XD loved the little mix-up; Elliot is such a dad;

This was really lovely. I loved how you intertwined everything, particularly with the black Jaguar. The connectedness yet separateness of the the story reminded me distinctly of the movie Crash (I know some writers don't like for their work to be reminiscent of other's, but I mean that as a complete compliment since the movie was fantastic). I also adored Lucy and her ducks, as well as her husband's bar being the one Munch stumbled into or so I assume. Anyway, great job!

That was amazing. Your use of vocabulary, syntax, diction- everything was so in character and emotionally effective. I love how you use everyone's different viewpoints. Fin's reflections on change and Munch's on the bar were different, but intriguing all the same. Also, the way you describe the sun going down and night beginning is a nice, dramatic effect, as well as , my favorite part was the part about Olivia thinking that she did something "before" and something "after." After what's happened to her, that's such a true, heartbreaking statement. Great story.)