great story. i love a happy ending where everything gets resolved. yay kigo

I enjoyed this immensely. I like the first one, but that was silly fun, of course you're supposed to like it. It fails it's purpose if the reader didn't have fun with it.

Anyways, this story was quite enjoyable and a much delved much more into the characters they are playing as.

And the hook-up to the break-up to the make-up was excellently done.

And look! You left plot holes? Can anyone say continuation? Not hoping,really since you deserve to break from this anyways.

Looking forward for more~~

Thanks for recommending this sequel. I enjoyed it a great deal. This was even more enjoyable than Under the boardwalk. Great story.

Trinity

Awesome! Loved all the different emotions and dynamics of the story! You totally left it open for a third story...that intelligence guy is 500 miles of bad road!

And we're back to the fluffy stuff. You had me worried there for a while. I wasn't sure you could bring it back to that happy place. But I should have learned from Bleak House that you can make anything have a sappy ending and make me love it.

This chapter was more filled out and had a very nice flow. You returned to your strengths here with precise dialogue and character-driven story telling. At some point, I'll have to go back and read the whole thing as one entity, unbroken by time.

Overall a fitting and realistic (emotionally) ending.

Alex

Hey! I finally got a few free moments. And I spent them reading this. First, it's a pretty long chapter. But I think it goes along with the transformation of this story from a nonsensical fluff piece into a more serious look at interpersonal relationships. If anyone had said we'd end up at this point when I read the first chapter of Under the Boardwalk, I would have thought they were smoking something.

You do a great job of portraying Shego's emotional turmoil throughout. And while her emotional attachment borders on obsession, I think the situation allows for it and even demands it. She gets pretty resourceful at the end there and the humor you're capable of begins peeking out from behind the wall of exposition you hid it behind for the first two thirds of the chapter.

Despite the hurried feel of most of this, it's still gripping and I'm really anxious to see what happens next.

Alex

I held off reviewing 19 because I was eager to see how it would play out.

The tension and the material for Nineteen was intense! Was the "toonification" you complained about was the neuron explanation?

However, I have a small gripe about chapter twenty. It was great as a whole, but why put it all into a single chapter? By putting both the "final battle", the "aftermath", the "return to normalcy" (at least whatever's normal for KiGo in this particular series) AND the "epilogue" into a single chapter, gave it a bit of a... erm... forced or rushed feel, and that each segment removed a little more cohesion and care that has always been a hallmark of your fiction. It left me feeling that some parts that could have been fleshed out were left on the cutting room floor for reasons of length.

Not to say I didn't like it. Far from it! Plenty of action; a suffusion of emotion, humour and snappy dialogue; normal everyday foibles and mistakes continuing to plague the girls; and a teaser of an ending. What's not to like?

I know you don't like action sequences; the fact that you can still get so much tension just out of a couple of kicks and punches, really, it's unnerving.

My favourite parts of Chapter Twenty:

1) Favourite dialogue exchange:
"I am not a mutant freak."

"It's okay, Kim. I think us freaks need to stick together."

2)Favourite mistake: Being locked out when attempting something totally romantic.

3) Favourite insert: (even just a whiff of a possible third instalment)
Bertie Widgeon didn't trust Stein to keep his oath of secrecy. In three weeks Stein would receive a promotion and be sent off to London as the assistant director of the European office, putting him far enough away to insure that the true story did not reach Betty Director.

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE consider another! Bertie's too evil to be ignored!

That was quite amusing. A little anti-climatic, but still quite amusing. I'm also wondering if you actually will continue this on later or not. But it's still at a pretty good place to stop it if you want to. But it was pretty interesting the way Shego was able to take out the bebes before she passed out from the shoes. As it is, if you continue this story, I would be interested in seeing if there's any sore feelings from Shego hitting Wade over the head and knocking him out like she did. But anyway, thanks for posting all of this. I really enjoyed it!

Very strong sequence in the lair and a sweet ending. A good second story in the Boardwalk series.

*giggling like a teenage shcoolgirl*
man i love it when Shego and Kim flirts with eachother.
I think you "capture" thir pesonality so well, especially Shego.
I thank you for this great story!
*HUGS*
=]

lol, one track mind much? I'm betting on before they go back too, also betting on neither seing much beach and sun or balls.

very nice ending even if it does feel slightly abrupt, but i guess thats unavoidable with all the potential story lines you've opened up in this.

following shego as she herself becomes a manipulator withing GJ, ally or opposition to betty, all to keep kim out of harms way and doing what she does best, would be a very interesting plotline to see.

Are really good ending.

Mutant freaks...snerk...nice bit.

It is nice to see those two together happily. The dialogue they had together was good, very natural.

Heather

Kim: What has KiY done now?! Best Enemies is a great universe, and now he's playing with us again.

Shego: What are you complaining about Princess? At least he's kept us together. Any universe that lets me get into your arms is a good one as far as I'm concerned. He even explained why we work, that you are just as rare as I am. Can you really be saying this wasn't a great story?

Kim: No, not that. It's just that he's left so many questions unanswered. What happened to the Bebes? Did Ron ever get together with one of the cheerleaders? What is Bertie Widgeon up too? Most importantly, did we ever leave the room during the vacation?!

Shego (turning to KiY): She's got you there. Looks like you've got some work to do writer-boy!

No name given. I guess Shego will wait until the possible wedding itself.Friction still in but it is to be expected. I think it will remain until old age.

So still a few things on the air but life is always moving. GJ has a few questionable things going on and Shego suspects of them I guess that future conflicts between Shego and GJ will happen with Kim in the middle. I know you won't cover them but stillits cool to mull about it.

Read you later!

Nice wrap-up. Though not commiting to one, you have set up a possible sequel involving Widgeon and his machinations.
All in all, I liked this very much. the differences between the characters in these two stories and your BE Universe are distinct and interesting.