that was good no offense to
Kathy but i'm still waiting for the
divorce so El and Liv can finally get together

For some reason, I didn't read or review this, even though I'm glad I finally read it. Normally, I would leave a long, analysis of your chapter and insight, but I really think that this is perfect- the gifts of mouthwash and antibacterial, Elliot's bragging, the wrapping up of a season's worth of questions and problems...everything is well placed, in character, and well written. I hope I get to read more of your writing, and I have fun at college! :) Great job!

Song title? "Your Man" by Josh Turner. Listen to the song and try to tell me you can't picture Liv and El... I picture them and that scene from wildlife every time I hear that song... yummy.


Or how about "Let's stay together" by Al Green

Or "Ain't no sunshine" by Bill Withers for when Liv was undercover?

For Fun, I can see El dedicating .."Loverboy" by Billy Ocean... to Liv. Or Legs by ZZTop... yeah. She could dedicate "Sharp dressed Man" by ZZTop to El.

Go ahead, give those songs a listen.


~Pix~

I liked it... except WHY is El still with the K-itch, and why is he not with Liv... you know, the woman who really loves him and doesn't just want to OWN him like K-itch does?


Other than that tiny bit... I really really liked it, loved the interactions with the squad and Liv... the mouthwash was too cool!

~Pix~

i like that - "We need a 12-step program." "What's the first step?" "We're still working on that" - LOL!

this sounds like its gonna be pretty good...i like it already!

OMG, thank you so much for this! Really I could hug you ;)

There are so many post-zebras fics right now that are all dark, deep, angsty, sad and so on, that I just needed one to be lighthearted and just hear Elliot say thank you to her for what she did, without having him dissect every last part to death what Liv said at the end and take it personally and being all angry and what's not... So really thank you! It was great!

Sorry about the rant!

*THUD* BEST POST-EP EVER!

“How about your head?”
“Notoriously hard.”
^^I bet that's not the ONLY head of his Liv hopes is "notoriously hard" *waggles eyebrows(yes I DID go there)

“Liv.”
“Yeah?”
“You were brilliant.”
^^If ONLY he could give the woman some props!

What she really needs now is a truckload of hand sanitizer.
“Exactly. Hey Liv, think fast.”
She catches it reflexively before recognizing it: a desk dispenser of Purell.
Elliot nods to the jug of Listerine still sitting on her desk. “Mouthwash was too obvious. Someone else was bound to come up with that.”
“Not funny,” she says, when really she’s trying not to cry because somehow he knew exactly what she needed.
^^AW! Hand Sanitizer = <3


“Bring her home?” Munch queries. “You make it sound like she’s a stray.”<-ROFL


And though I hate to say it (b/c AK = BLEH) That whole convo abt Kathy & marriage and the house & kids was DEAD ON. I could EASILY picture that discussion on the show! Great expression of the characters!

All in all, FABULOUS job on this one hun! :D Can't wait for s11 post-eps! eo <3 Kristin

So so so so so good! The finale was far too short and I hope O'Halloran is properly mourned next season (the guy was a show staple!) Also..Munch and the mouthwash = brilliant. When I watched the kiss I seriously wanted to scrub my mouth with soap and hot water. Anyway, great job!

This is very good...the silences and the tensions are often the hardest things to write and you capture them with aplomb both here and in the other pieces of yours I've read so far. You are very talented and I suspect will only continue to grow more so as you practice more.

I didn't see this episode, but I'm really curious as to what I missed after reading your one shot. I like the conversation you have between Liv and El. I didn't know the Kathleen was abused, but it makes a world of sense now...Your story made me want to see the episode I missed! :)

You didn't go with the Undercover angle I was expecting. Kudos to you for that. While they are emotionally satisfying (especially from you), they seem almost safe. Olivia's reactions now can be traced back to Undercover and Sealview with very little effort. I'm glad you went the extra mile and did something more out of the box, even if you did reference it. Very good, and, as always, practically perfect in every way.

Can't wait for Only Witness!

I really loved this chapter! I really enjoyed this epi because it shows people what is going on that they are not aware of. Great job!!

Elliot's lesson to learn, that he cannot solve every problem, should have been taught to him long ago. Your scene should have been included on the show. Furthermore, Olivia shows true friendship when she rainchecks the drink and nudges him toward home. Kathy and Eli need Elliot for those feedings and changings, which, of course, mean much more than that. And Liv knows it.

Keep up the good work.

That was good. I like how you manage to keep the mood somber without being overly depressing. In other words, you inform with intent to alert. And, through all this, you stick to the characters' personalities and don't make it just a list of facts. You bring Munch's conspiracies in, and you keep just enough humor to keep readers interested. This episode, Hell, hit me hard. If you read Mariska's blog, you'll know she got all the stuff up there before the episode, so I read that five minutes before I saw the episode, and I was expecting tragedy but not on that scale. She asked her readers to write to the president, so that's what I did. You know, I researched genocide last year (an 8th grade project), but I guess I hadn't covered this.