As you said, a bit of a filler chapter. Though you have sustained my interest in Jenners... I can't decide what to think of him. I suppose he's a villain, but...

At any rate, I think you might want to reread this chapter, specifically looking for places where modern speech creeps in. It just happens here and there, but it might be worth looking for. I do like the chapter though. :)

Hey there! Remember me? :P Sorry it took so long for me to read this. I finally had some free time.

I think you should reread the first section. There are some parts of it that don't quite seem to click, but I think you can pick them out yourself. Also, you describe Eddie's "yellowed bow-tied." I presume you meant bowtie. :3

Nice chapter! Lots of interesting things brought up. Though I don't entirely understand why Gerard seems to exist to torment Lydia. It might be something he enjoys, but he seems almost like the reason his character exists is to cause her extra hardship.

Hey, this is really good, you write great Mouse Detective fics! I know you have a lot going on, so I will just put this on my story alert and I will know when you update.

Thanks!

This is actually a very good chapter. :-) I think you presented Ratigan not OOC, but as a *complex* character that was something *more* than he was in the movie. ^_^ Great work! :D

My only "complaint" is that you made a small spelling error here:

“Ceratinly. Good day, Basil.”

i think you did an excellent job on this chapter! keep up the good work!

Another splendid chapter! ^_^ Can't wait to read more! :D

Nice chapter; I can't wait for the next installment! But I find myself wondering why Basil thinks he needs to keep his continued interest in the case a secret from Dawson. It just seems unnecessary and slightly out of character, but perhaps you have a good reason. Oh, and there were just a few little grammar mistakes:

When Lydia sits, "forgetting the two men before her, the thug hiding behind the wall, the rat who dwelt in the dark places away from the sun, her family, and only of two people: herself and Shaun Parker," I think you meant to add the word 'thought' before "only of two people." No biggie.

There were two more, but I forgot where they were. Sorry. There was one before this one and one after. Anyway, nice job, and I hope you update soon! I'm waiting for the rising tension to come to a head and get exciting. :3 Although this stuff is interesting too.

i loved it!

Excellent chapter! ^_^ Can't wait to read more.

Ratigan and Rose DURING Meg? O HOO HOO I love it! And he truely loves Meg? Or is he talking about Rose? Can't wait to read more, and this Jenners situation. Great chapter, I love Ratigan's interactions with these women!

In the beginning, you mention Lydia's "self-depreciation." Do you mean self-deprecation, perhaps? Or am I mistaken?

At any rate, nice chapter! Very interesting, and just what I needed tonight. I look forward to the next installment eagerly!

excellent chapter! can't wait for more!

No, it's very good! I think that's part of what I do in my fan fiction now, try to work on things that I have trouble with. Or at least I do when I fix things from before...anyway, loved this, nice to see things from Meg's POV again. Can't wait for more!

The sentence “It’s only legal to associate with a criminal and not tell the police" doesn't seem to make sense...

Also, when Isabelle says “Did you have a bad day or something that you have to complain about every single little thing that is bothering you?” it sounds very modern and colloquial, in contrast to the rest of the story. :)

A small typo: "Thank you, but not, I really must be going," from Miss Lyon.

The bit where Meg is thinking to herself seems as if it is too distant, as if the speaker is very much removed from the happenings, the last sentence especially so. "I had known Basil for three years now, and yet I felt like I was no closer to understanding him and his world than I had been as his maidservant. I believed that the only reason he cared for me was due to my association with his archenemy."

Another typo? "I would have to speak with him if I wanted assurance that our relationship was only cemented by our common enmity against Ratigan."

When Meg offers to warm up some soup for Basil, he replies with "Sure," but this sounds like it might be a little modern...

Ooh, I see more symbolism! Intentional or un? With the simmering soup pot. It gets more turbulent as the conversation does.

You described Meg, "I leaned my head against my right hand, as if it was too much effort to keep it up," but I think you want to make the language less passive. Because it currently reads as if the speaker is an observer. I would go ahead and say "I leaned my head against my right hand, feeling that it required too much effort to keep it up," or something similar.

Wowzers, that's a lot of quibbles. But I do like the chapter, and it is good. I look forward to the next one eagerly!

As much as I adore the metaphor with the Four Season myth, it seems unusual that a lowly thug would have read such things. :/

I can't wait for more of the story to unfold! Hope there's some action soon. But it's all quite good! You might want to check through for typos in the last few chapters. There aren't many, but they exist. Anway, love it, and update soon! :]