I absolutely love this piece. Especially the bonds between Edmund and Peter being explore. Neat rhyme, by the way.

One of the first Narnia stories I've read. Fabulous! Great job with characterization, and I freaking love the chant/jump rope rhyme that you came up with.

I feel like calling you and your ficlet 'amazing' would be a gross understatement. :) I really loved reading this, and I thank you so much! :D

That was amazing!

Oh my gosh, this is one of the most intense Narnia fanfics I've ever read. I don't remember a time when my heart would clench up through the ENTIRE story. Simply amazing and beautiful! I first started reading your "Letting Go" story and got intrigued when you mentioned "Terror Gold" and I'm so glad I started reading this as this is officially one of my favorite Narnian fanfics now! Thanks for the lovely read!

Clever

huh. Cool.

I'm going to review all three chapters here because I just couldn't stop continuing on as I finished each one.

First of all, I truly like the fact that you told the story of Peter's wild wrath and Edmund's capture and torture in the way you did. Having read some of your other fics, I'm sure you could have told it very well in an "as the events happened" style but it would just be another "Edmund-gets-in-trouble-and-horribly-hurt-and-has- to-be-rescued" hurt/comfort fic. But hearing the tale along with Caspian makes this story so much more powerful, so much more heart-rending.

Along with the children's rhyme (which despite what I read in one review is quite rhythmic enough to jump rope to) and Caspian's reflection and mental warning to his uncle at the end, I think the part that made me get a lump in my throat was relating Edmund's and Peter's actions with the signet ring to Lucy's explanation of the discovery of the ring still attached to Edmund's finger. Of course, Edmund would automatically put it on his left hand after years of wearing it that way after his maiming and Peter's moving to Edmund's whole now un-maimed right hand... well, there are all sorts of ways that could be read; gratefulness that Edmund was eventually healed, professing belief that what happened before will not happen again (even if Peter doesn't quite believe it), and so forth.

Another reviewer mentioned that Aslan would not support a King who did what Peter did in his wrath and used that to explain why they disliked the story. I disagree with them. Aslan is unconditionally forgiving and loving regardless of, in spite of and maybe even because of human faults and frailty. I believe it's more than possible for Peter, even though he is the Magnificent, to have this kind of fault and still be beloved of Aslan. It actually makes him more real and human instead of some perfect icon. Being unable to separate the individual's action from that of the group and vice versa is a very common human failing or else we would not still be struggling with prejudice and wars today. Even his berserker rage can' completely condemn him to damnation, nor the despair and fear that are the root of it.

Your skill in word craft and story-telling are phenomenal and I look forward to one day finding your original work in my local bookstore. Bravissimi for a wonderful and thought provoking piece of work.

BAMF.

Oh my gosh!

Interesting

love the story

Oh my gosh, this is sooo beautiful, the rhyme is haunting and lovely! Ugh you're beautiful for writing this.

brilliant!
im kind of dissapointed because it was not long enough to me
but the story was amazing and perfect

OMGGG!