I'm starting to wonder about those pokemon. They don't sound natural at all. Good job with this, keep going!

Yaoi: i agree, Paul and Silver look alot alike. I believe that silver was the insperation for paul...i mean, they treat pokemon the same, they look alot alike, and the picture in corocoro when paul was re;eased looked like a photoshoped picture of silver.

It's kinda like mitsumi from 'pokemon diamond and pearl adventure' (NOT RELATED pokemon adventures in ANY way) she's a loose spinoff of dawn.

oh, silver should be paul's half brother. (i can't wait til the 27th, pokemon adventures vol. 29 is coming out and the pokedex holders will be revived)

keep writing, i like plot twists, makesw the story or novel intresting

Firefly: thank you for putting some depth into your chapter this time

Yaoi: Firefly! i'm sorry please ignore her

Firefly: you're one to talk, not finishing this chapter til 6:25 AM

Yaoi: i had to watch a movie my mom wanted me to see aqnd i remembered i had a project due

Firefly: always exuses, anyway i like the chapter

Yaoi: it was rally good, as always keep writing

So THAT'S why Paul is, er, Paul. Can't wait for Ash, Cyrus, ect. to appear.

Yaoi: finally paul shows emotion instead of being a little emo kid. don't wory about reviews, i only got 4 and i'm still writing...

Firefly: ...finish the 3rd chapter already *looks at screen* when did the feedback/review box get updated??

Yaoi: heck if i know, anyways keep writing. i feel the plot thickenin in my veins, well see you next chapter

Good start for a fic.

Okay, I need to ask a favor. I need you to review ChristianDragon's Desperate Love, and tell him how distraut I am over the latest chapter, since he has blocked me. He got Pikachu injured so badly that he can't battle for all of eternity! How could someone do that!?!?!? He has permanently scarred me with his fic!

Rant over. Can't wait for you to uplode the next chapter.

Firefly:pauls shoes are the same color of his jacket,purple. other than that i didn't see any other mistakes

Yaoi: great chapter, keep writing.

Yaoi: you can go far with this plot so i'll sit back nd enjoy the ride. keep writing