A great story. Very well written.

Carlilse is such a deep character and I think you captured him perfectly.

Very, very good! It's quite a curiosity, the tale you've spun. I'm not sure what else there is to say, it was so well-written that I can't critique it.
Sincerely,

Sweet Valentine Vampire

Wow. I dnt think i've ever looked at it that way..at least not from Carlise's veiw. This is good, and probaly how he feels.
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A good idea, and a nice writing. It's nice to go through Carlisle's thoughts and see what he really thinks. And I like the ending too. Kind of a foreboding for people who haven't read the books yet.

Nice job. :D

Aiko-Chan SoT