|Reviews for On a Pale Broomstick|
| Kythorian 1/6/13 . chapter 3
Interesting concept. I remember reading the Incarnations of Immortality back in high school...I don't remember many details, but it was an interesting idea. I like how you combined them. Hope you come back and continue this at some point.
| Robin42069 11/26/12 . chapter 3
lmao sirus pranked satan
| Katsuhito 2/18/12 . chapter 3
Lol! This is a neat story. I read all the incarnations, and the first was my favorite. So far, this is turning out well, and I give it a B. If it grows to novel length and maintains this level of writing, it goes up to an A (or A if that exists - it didn't in my school).
I look forward to more.
| Duvessa Lilian Snape 5/10/11 . chapter 3
Oh my! Sirius can be so bad even Satan wants him to go away! I could just see James' face if he were to hear that! This is a great story my friend, I hope to see more of it soon. ;-)
| AnFan-n-More 3/9/11 . chapter 3
Very funny dialog in your story. I enjoyed it.
| the.stories.live.on 1/23/11 . chapter 3
Sirius is pranking Santan? I bet James is jealous. Oh man, this story is so good. You have got to continue it. So amazing. I also love your pen name. Well, keep up the good work, and good luck!
| Draeconin 1/3/11 . chapter 3
This looks like it could be a great story! Are you going to continue it?
| The-Resident 12/5/10 . chapter 3
Borrowing from Piers Anthony? Couldn't pick anyone better. (Grin) You do know about the new Incarnations book, yes? I've got to get it to complete the set. I've also got to play catch up with the last 3 or 4 Xanth books. Keep up the great work.
| aalens 11/20/10 . chapter 2
Another entertaining chapter. Thank you!
'The camera shot showed a group of demons sneering and making rude gestures while several damned souls were giving discrete 'thumbs up' signs.' - The word with the meaning that is intended here is spelled 'discreet'. The adjective discreet means prudently self-restrained, tactful, being careful or using caution so as not to be too obvious. Discrete however means separate, detatched, individually distinct and opposed to continuous.
Here: 'The smiley face began to silently laugh. NO, BUT THAT IS A RATHER UNIQUE IDEA.'There cannot be degrees of uniqueness, something is either the only one in existence or it is not. So, something can be almost unique (almost the only one) but cannot be very unique ( very the only one in existence) nor rather unique (rather the only one)
| aalens 11/20/10 . chapter 1
Love this. The best line of all was: 'Harry Potter had just killed Death!'
The will was thoughtful; apart from Harry forgetting to look after Lupin, Dobby or Hedwig - sob!
| GinnyMyLove 11/20/10 . chapter 3
I love what you've done, but I had the exact same crossover idea for quite awhile now and I might take a crack at it. If you are going to continue then I will try to avoid sounding like I ripped you off.
in mine I plan a 3 part series with the Death, Time, and Satan incarnations all getting a book to themselves. Time will tell if I ever get the steam to actually do it. I'm not looking forward to a trilogy when I just finished a 550k epic.
Anyway, it has been a very fun read, and I hope you continue...or I will.
| Lady Logos 11/18/10 . chapter 3
This was super hilarious. I hope that you update it. Your last update date was actually my birthday, so thannks for the gift. :)
Good grammar, nice plot and all :)
| David M. Potter 11/1/10 . chapter 3
| David M. Potter 10/31/10 . chapter 2
| Magdalene Remington 10/24/10 . chapter 3
Brilliant story so far. XD Sirius doesn't surprise me, being 27 or was it 28% evil. XD Can't wait for the next chapter!