What an intense chapter. I can't wait til they take Orochimaru down!

Yay for updates! Also, I am very glad you got a job. Congratulations.

i think these stories r cute!

Nice work on this chapter...i'm sure your friend is plaeased with the results. Man, having Deidara was so random to me. Can't wait til the next chapter.

Wo! I like it~! and lol Deidara XD u need to have Tobi visit at some point XD Great chapter x

El Gasp! DEIDARA *glomp* Nice chapter. Very nice.

wow, good story, it's hard to find family one's that focus on the sand-sibs.

I'm not really happy with the fact that the girls have to leave Suna, I'd understand Temari and Awaii (they just gave birth after all) but not Red. Isn't she a ninja? she's a big girl, she can take care of herself. Plus, med-ninjas are a rare thing, she'd be more useful on the battlefield than hiding (I actually find it a bit sexist,..)

And why are the babies being left behind as well? wouldn't they be even more vulnerable than the fully-trained-jounin-ninjas? Kind of a plothole,...

Sorry, I don't want to be mean with my comments (cause I adore Makoto-chan) but it just struck me odd.

wow! what a chapter! I think the next chapter should definately have some comedy with Kankuro Shikamaru and the babies. Oh and Could you explain how Makoto was being choked even though he was supposedly dreaming?

Hey :) (its xxhtloverxx from DA) this is great, but you're still using the word 'of' a lot when you should be using 'have'. + I think it would be better if u didn't switch between English and Japanese lol. e.g. 'Ano but' sounds funny lol. + u spelt 'nani?' with an extra 'a' for some reason lol. Great story so far though :) I can't wait to see how Shikamaru deals with looking after his child XD

The Mist village...hmm? I can't wait for teh next chapter. Seriously.

lol I think it was something more than a dream, and lmao "Her lips crashed into his" why crashed?? XD sounds very comical. I would like to hear Gaara's thoughts and feelings on this lol. is he enjoying it or not? XD can't wait for the next chapter xx

loved the chappy!^^

i love this as well as sand parent i enjoyed that a lot too please continue and consider making a third one of this perhaps i just know i would be great just like this and sand parent

This chapter had anxiety, love and excitement. It wowed me. Good job. I especially loves the Makoto ending. A wonderful idea. thumbs up!

Thank God you didn't poison Kankuro. If you did, I would probably have the worlds biggest freakout. When Kankuro got poisoned in the series, I flipped out, having a worry attack. So when I found out Kankuro was fine, I was all like "PHEW!" And Makoto's desire to find "Hissy-chan" reminds me of Naruto's desire to find Sasuke. Great chapter!