 Beyond Flight 2008-11-03 . chapter 1Hmm...Cute fic. However, I do think the finger biting thing was a little mushy and OOC, but i'm not much of a romantic, so I suppose it's all simply perspective.
Another thing I want to point out. Check your grammer before you post. You tend to switch between past and present tense. If you can fix that, the story would run a lot more smoothly. |