Little double edges and unspoken insinuations, I like that. Swearing on Barbossa's life, right... :D What got me was the absence of commas in "I do believe I fantasized strangling her perfect little neck at one point or maybe I was pressing my lips to it." Perfect.

I'm not very good at reviewing so I'll try to keep this short
Wow Liz, I absolutely adored this little ficlet of yours! I especially loved the last two lines, in which Jack really shows how he feels about the loss of Elizabeth. Just by calling her Lizzie it all comes out Apart from the little hints that were interwoven in the entire fic I loved their subtlety. The poor sod really loved her, didn't he? All in all, great job!

with love,
Lil' D.

your teacher still asks you to write essays? damn that man! doesn't he know you're an established writer! oh, well, just send him to ff and you should get the best marks for the rest of your student life.

-laughs and sobs uncontrollably, as only an overemotional female can do
OHMYGOD, LIZ.

To any loony bin who does not find this little piece perfect: Please, go look up how to decipher hidden sentiments. Honestly.

God.-just dies
Perfect. Just perfect. That's all I can say.

I'd usually have some long review trying unsuccessfully to tell you how very much I adore this, but you know what, I can't. There's too much to say. Too much of a good thing here, you know? You make me writhe with pain when you get out a story like this so heartbreakingly bittersweet and would-be-flippant. Only you could do it so well; nobody else could. Although I often wish I could.

You amaze me. Thank you for giving this to US instead of your English teacher.

ILY, darling.

Thank you for writing.-continues to sob
Ta.

X

Love,

Zay-la

That was interesting. You've got jack's character down.

Hey.

I have to say that this wasn't exactly my favorite fic of yours. Perhaps that is the whole AM/FM thing going on, but for Jack to say that he didn't care for her one moment, and then say that she was incredible and beautiful the next seemed a bit...contradictory, I suppose.

And some of this really just didn't seem like things Jack would say. I can understand what you think, but really...'So yes, she was insignificant and meant close to nothing to me if not just nothing. Even if she was an interesting woman. She meant a lot to him, the movie showed that quite clearly. I understand why he would deny it aloud, but he never really acted like...this, in the movies. Sure he was all 'hush hush' on his feelings and all, but he wasn't...like that about it. And if he is writing this down I don't know why he'd act like that in something that he's writing. But that is just me.

I liked the very, very end when he called her 'Lizzie Swann, Pirate King.' That was very fitting. And I loved the whole thing about how drinking to her is a very correct piraty thing to do.

But other than that...well, you understand. And I thought I'd review so you wouldn't nag me about it later on when you saw that I didn't.

The writing style was good, as always, but this seemed very off Jack Sparrow to me. Just my opinion. He seemed very... I don't know...uncaring. Unconcerned. Laughing off her death, etc etc. *shrug* I think he would have acted differently.

But that's just me, and that's my...semi-critiquing post. I don't know, I didn't give you very much advice, but I thought I'd tell you what I thought, and I'm sorry if I hurt you, but I know I probably didn't... believe you me, this hurt me to write more than it will hurt you to read.*hugs and kisses
Anna

Are you sure he didn't try to drag her there? *the reason has been found why it takes ten repeats of the phrase 'Captain Jack Sparrow(emphasis on the captain) to get her in bed* LOL. I love it.

lol, aw, poor jack. i thought the last 2 lines were cute, they're my favorite part of the fic.
sorry i havnt had time to read and review your drabbles and other short stories, i've been super busy with school, but i promise i will get around to it eventually P

ciao
Ele

I am ever so grateful that you decided to share this lovely little piece with us instead of your teacher. I quite enjoyed it. It just sounds like Jack. And, let's face it, not many people can write the infamous Captain Jack Sparrow character correctly when it's just dialogue and actions, and then you, my dear, come along and write his *thoughts* with such glaring accuracy it's as if we're inside Mr. Sparrow's fine-looking head! So, cheers to you for your exceptional fanfiction, and may there be many more to come! (Wow, that sounded kind of like a toast... honestly, it wasn't intentional, it just came out that way.)