Poor Lucius's wife. It must be terrible to witness one's husband having passionate sex with a 'whole'. And what on earth does 'that girl needs a good wiping from her old man' mean? Sounds kinky. Oh, and how exactly does one turn a 'coroner'?

It goes without saying that the plot is laughably bad, all the characters are so far OOC they're practically from another planet entirely, and your grammar, spelling, general punctuation, capitalization, etcetera, etcetera are all absolutely dreadful. The reviewer could go on and on about your unfortunate ignorance as to the various forms of 'your' and 'there', your appallingly limited vocabulary, and your abysmal lack of subject-verb agreement.

Dear, in the future, do make a habit of typing with your eyes open, and remain conscious and alert during English class. Your 'writing abilities' (or lack thereof) indicate that you've sat through the entirety of your education with your fingers planted firmly in your ears. Perhaps, had this not been the case, you would have written a decent story.

Yours,

Ghost

(Eins)

love itx x

STUPID LUCIUS! I HOPE YOUR LIFE IS RUINED! YOUR SUCH A TERRIBLE PERSON! HOW COULD YOU CHEAT ON HER? YOU JERK!

great story though! thats a bunch of unexpected twists on the story. im curious on where your going with this. update soon please! PLEASE.

update soon its really good

update soon can't wait for more chapters good work

wow.

umm i like your story u still doing it?

really interesting!please update soon

wow! whats up with hermione? this is really good by the way. i like it. you should keep going. im...so...SLEPY! i have had had no sleep since forever! kk bye! have fun on halloween!

Way to break the english language.

I think it should be Harry, and her street smarts should help him