Very sad and very well written. I don't usually like stories that use second-person as the POV for significant passages, but you write well in that style. It really gets us into Don's head. Thanks, Beth

Oh my GOD. You effing KILLED CHARLIE! I am bawling like a baby because in doing that you killed Don too...

Well written I like the style, alternating between the action and Don's perceptions. But I'm just gutted now.

Oh God you killed Charlie.
Great story, it broke my heart but it was really good.

huh? what happened? didnt quite catch it...charlie's shot yes; who shoot him? why? how? when? argh

Hey,
Great Story! I really liked it, it was suttle and well written! I understood the character death references clearly, although now I'm sad :-(. Dons reaction to his fathers news was perfect and the last three lines between Colby and Don were amazing. It clearly protrayed how much Don cared about Charlie. Keep up the great work!

From Alison Kingston

I liked the story but I must have missed the implied death because a;; I read was charlie was hurt all well nice story.

what happend? for me the ending is not clear. as in charlie died?or he lived?