Ahaha Severus is staring at Aline, this amuses me greatly.“To attack him….he rather expected that. To attack Nott's grieving sons? That was unconscionable! I really do enjoy how much he cares about his students despite how he acts a lot of the time. I know I’m probably repeating myself (probably in all my reviews), but I felt like expressing that again.
Lucius stopping the goblin from hurting “his” dragon was cool I like that dragon.
Aw yay! The Notts being reunited! Lucius really does care about his friends doesn’t he?
Chapter 40
It’s lovely how Narcissa and Andromeda are on good terms. And I love Teddy, just as a side note :P whatever fic I’m reading, I just love Teddy Lupin in general ahaha.
Oooh and “playing Muggle” again. I wonder what shenanigans they’ll get up to this time :D
Gregory saying he wished he’d not used the Cruciatus curse. And the wood work thing. You’ve made him a very 3-dimensional, likeable character in my opinion
That’s really mean what they’re doing to muggles -.- I’m not going to treat you to one of my equality rants though, once I start I don’t stop. Racism, homophobia, gender equality... I really like to talk about this ahaha :L I’ll add ‘discrimination against Muggles’ to my list.
And what on earth is Severus doing? Looks like I’ll have to wait to find out, because I’m going out now. But I should return soon! I have a few exams left, but not til Thursday, and I’m not as worried about these ones (yet..
Have a good week, best wishes!
I am enjoying the story, but you might want to put in the summary that it is essentially a sequel to some of your previous works. It irritated me that I had to stop this story partway through to read your earlier stuff.
I’m not sure whether to find it amusing, cute or a little sad that Draco is jealous of his baby brother hehe. Only natural I suppose, sibling rivalry is one of the most natural things in the world I feel. That or I just like to terrorize my sister...
This is a very entertaining section. I really hope that Draco ends up naturally calling Ladon ‘Brax’ in the future, that’d be really sweet, and I am doing that thing I do where I imagine fictional characters in the future yes yes.
I’ve decided that Bayly is probably my favourite original character... have I already said that? I’m saying it again.
Chapter 37
You called Harry the “Boy Wonder” and I thought of Robin (as in Batman and Robin) and this really amused me and I thought I’d let you know even though it’s really irrelevant.
And now I have learnt the word bellicose. Yay!
Share torture. This worries me. And I googled ‘scearu peine’ when you first mentioned it to see if it was something in another language... I assume you created this yourself? I really love it when people create whole new things in fanfics, and do it well which is something you’ve done quite a lot of. Not just new characters, but whole ideas and concepts and places, etc. It’s really nice
Snape is a very good headmaster. Doing what he has to, taking on his responsibilities and any accountabilities that come his way. (That sentence doesn’t make sense outside of my brain...“He was plucking an airborne chunk off my head and his cufflink got caught in my hair. We were trying to get it loose. I have a feeling right now that Aline is lying...
Ooh ooh ooh NO flashback thing whatever they’re called and this is distressing! Oh god, that is horrible!
Chapter 38
I kind of hope the counter curse goes wrong. Because I am secretly quite sadistic towards fictional characters, and like reading emotionally painful things..."Mr. Young, if you persist in this folly I will be tempted to—to give you detention for the rest of the year." Yes, I like. This made it very much worth not having a horrible chapter of pain and sadness that about 35% of me wanted.
It seems a very Voldemort-ish thing to use that form of torture. I don’t doubt that he found it out and used it on some people.
The meanings behind Lucius’ chin movements ahaha, I liked that a lot.
Ooh ooh, interesting dream there Severus, eh eh
So that’s all I have time for today, unfortunately. But please, do not hesitate to send me messages telling me to come back and read some more! I find it also helps in motivating me to do other things, like study, as I then need to work on prioritising and scheduling my time :D
I am ready for your sharpened stick attack.
I am also very sorry that I could not keep my word and review yesterday. I actually did read chapter 34, and my aim was to read 35 and review when I got home from my grandma's, but by the time we got back it was really late and the internet was off and le sigh. Which is a pretty terrible excuse I know.
So this is my review I wrote up yesterday, plus me reading chapter 35 today!
Chapter 34
It seems like Bayly and Floyd are quite good friends. They trust each other at least, which is nice. And Floyd fancies Luna ahaha awww :3
Oooh Rita Skeeter is at the wedding, this could get interesting...
While it was admirable that Draco defended his family, I have a feeling that his parents won't be too pleased that he revealed they made the vow of fidelity I expect she will twist his words unpleasantly.
Ooh ooh ohh baby! Exciting! :D
Oh god, a foot first. Now I'm no expert, but I know that is not a good thing.
When Abraxas said "Unless you've devised a way of shoving the baby back up, I think that ship has sailed." I legitimately snorted ahaha!
And yaaaay babies. I have a soft spot for babies, I'm glad he is okay :D
Chapter 35"What kind of parents name their child 'Severus'?"Yours?" AHAHAHAHA BEST!
Ladon is a really nice name. I like it :3
You've written Hagrid very well his character is spot on as far as I can see.
Oooh I wonder what Rodolphus' plan is...
I really should read these more often. Thare's lots of little plot points I forget, and sometimes I get confused as to what character's did in previous chapters. See, NOW I remember about Varden.
Well, that's all I have time for today. Hopefully I'll be back pretty soon! And I think I did okay on my essay, thank you for asking we'll see.
Ok, Sirius coming round and making up with Snape? Never ever, and he should have gotten his backside kicked way more (Sirius, that is).
I probably will finish reading this story because I got that far but while I wasn't too keen on the getting Narcissa back to life plot, reviving Sirius in particular is really taking the cake ... And Snape and Sirius reconciling makes me literally want to gag.
Sorry, by and large I have enjoyed your story initially but all this happy ever after stuff emerging here at every stop and corner isn't quite my cup of tea.
Ah, finally the love potion issue is resolved! Good riddance to Lily Evans Potter ...
So, hopefully the rest will go smoothly but then, we are talking Snape here
As for the Malfoys: Traditionally, landed gentry would not equally split their wealth and heritage among their children; wealth accumulation works by consolidation, so typically Draco should expect the main share, some minor but still sufficient assets would go to the younger siblings. Standard principle of wealth accumulation equal distribution of inheritance is kind of middle-class
And Hermione hm, I never really got why she would be with Ron. Not sure about Krum, either, but Ron? I know it's canon-compliant but I thought that JKR was of her rocker there, too. *shrug*
Jeez, I know Snape has been friends with the Malfoys for decades but seriously, if any of my friends ever treated me half as patronizing as they do in this chapter, they would be ex-friends pretty quickly. I really can't see Snape standing for this, most certainly not on such a sensitive topic.
Also, I do fully disagree with Narcissa here if Aline is worth anything she will like him the way he is and not like some house-trained puppy. Women like that seriously piss me off because I find such behaviour highly dishonest and manipulative; they usually deserve the door-mats of husbands they usually end up with and make miserable for the rest of their lifes. I hope Aline has a better sense, otherwise I hope Snape gets over her. He does deserve better, imo.
Poor Draco, playing up here, after all his life's belief has been shaken.
I am feeling a bit sorry for his lot, but then they all need to wake up that the new rules are different. I suppose he will learn or are you going to turn him into a rebel without a cause, perhaps?
Still some chapters for me to go to find out (same as if Snape Aline get together; really, Snape is losing his touch here, lol).
One thing I never get in many fanfics is the obsession with Snape's hair.
I mean why would anyone care if it's greasy or not? If you like someone, you like them warts and all (and if you don't it matters even less), so I am notoriously puzzled why this part seems so important to many fanfic writers.
A potions mistress to brew a hair tonic for a potions totally clueless. I can see why Snape would be pissed off, actually. If she wants to get into his good books, something he might be interested in should be a better approach.
Still, let me guess (as I haven't finished this story romance is in the air? *grin*
Heyo! Sorry I missed the weekend. But I am kinda notorious for being late for stuff, haha!
Chapter 31
Oooh the dolls. Creepy! I am very interested to see how Bayly is.
Snape’s desire to look after Bayly and stop other students talking about him is lovely. This is a really nice side of Snape that makes him such a great character“You stand there defying me and contradicting me like few pupils ever have and you claim not to be brave? It's either that or stupid, and you certainly aren't stupid. I really liked this bit
I love what he said to Bayly so much! Especially this“Courage is not the absence of fear, it is doing what you need to do in spite of your fear." It is so true!
Oh goodness, I really hope Draco doesn’t get hurt!
Chapter 32
Genuinely snorted at this line“Draco appeared to have swallowed a camel.
Also this was one of the best things! “Lucius sneered at the idea that anyone would actually believe he wanted to sit there listening to a bunch of busybodies dig dirt on their peers. After all, Narcissa would tell him if anything interesting came to light.” Making out he doesn’t care for their gossip, but just gets it all from his wife later, hahaha! Well, that’s how it came across to me anyways."A Malfoy doesn't cry in public," quoted the lad quickly."Not that one," Lucius chided.” I am particularly enjoying this chapter so far just for the humour!
And I learnt another new word! Lothario! Yaaaaay!
A fight! Many fights! Awwww Luna sticking up for Bayly. I do love that girl.
Oh my goodness! Turned into house elves! HAHAHAHAHA That seems very harsh to have whipped the students though
Oh god I thought Bayly was cutting himself aaah D: well, its as bad I suppose but eeeeh that worried me!
Chapter 33
Oh poor Bayly! I just want to hug him!
Snape is right! There is so much house prejudice aarrrgghhh! About time its pointed out.
These Muggle Studies lessons sound awesome! Harry and Hermione appear to be doing well with those.
Unfortunately that’s all I have time for today. I have exams coming up soon, so I don’t know how often I’ll be able to read this
But until next time, best wishes!
Second time I've read this trilogy and have to say I enjoyed it as much (or more) this time. If some people have said they don't like your characterizations...pooh on them! I prefer to think of it as a unique perspective. You took canon characters and scratched and scratched away to reveal unknown personalities and traits. Oh, and your droll sense of humor had me in sophisticated lip twitches. I look forward to Diaries, but forgive my rudeness...I only read completed stories, but you are on my alerts. I look forward to it. You are a superb author...please continue.
Ooh ooh ooh I remember what was happening and I am excited!
Oh god, Dolohov is a sick, twisted bastard! My goodness! He really got what he deserved, methinks.“Wallowing in anger or self-pity isn't going to change that, is it? I can't alter the past any more than you can, but I can make things better for the future." I loved this line it is so true!
I’m getting worried that Dolohov isn’t actually dead...
Oh my god I genuinely feel a little heartbroken for Bayly emotionally invested is what I am hahaha! But no “hahaha” because this is not funny. It’s horrible and well written and gee am I glad I started reading this again! :D
Chapter 30
A walrus eating a seal... how incredibly random!
I’m not sure whether I approve of Lucius’ generosity. It is very nice of him and all, but there is definitely a motive there of wanting to be seen as some kind of charitable benefactor. Though I admit, it is a lovely thing to do haha. Yay for those lucky orphans!
I really liked it when you said obliviation would be “like shooting a spark into a haystack and hoping it doesn't ignite” that sounded brilliant.
I also loved the following little speech"Yes, Severus, everything is your fault! You run the bloody universe! Those people who talk of Malfoy conceit are evidently not acquainted with you. I'll grant you're a fuck-up, but not for this. You did everything in your power to safeguard Bayly and then to find him—it's not like either of us sat twiddling our thumbs and thinking happy thoughts to bring him back, we busted our arses! Dolohov is responsible for what happened to Bayly, not you! Why do you always take everything on yourself?
I love how Narcissa is amiable towards the house elves. It makes a change from how Lucius was towards Dobby. Though I suppose how we saw him interact with said elf at the end of CoS was at least partially fair considering he had been sneaking behind his back, etc. Hummm, I never thought of it like that.
Unfortunately that is all I have time for today, and I apologise for not doing this yesterday like I said I would.
But look at that: a third of the way through! HELL YEAH! :D
Anyway, I shall hopefully be back soon, and you take care.
I am really excited for this ball/party!
This is great. Draco and friends talking about sex really amused me. (I’m not immature at all.) Lucius’ reactions to everything were hilarious!
Bayly and Gloria are really sweet.
Ahhh NO! Cliff hanger! Oh my god, that was his father, right? I need to know what happens to him!
Hahaha Snape sneaking through Aline’s stuff to find the formula! Hehehe.
Noooo I hope Bayly is okay! See, look at that, I’ve grown attached. That’s the mark of a good character and a well written story.
Chapter 27
You write amazingly well. That is all I can say. You can do humour and make me laugh, and now you’re doing this and it’s scary and I want to kick Dolohov and hug Bayly and nnnnnnnnn
I really really hope they find him and he’s safe!
Chapter 28"He'd best keep it in his pants when he does, if he knows what's good for him," I sniggered hahaha
I like how Narcissa is working things out with her sister.
Unfortunately that is all I have time for today, but I shall be back soon, hopefully.
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