Don't worry. AuroraSprite is also AquaSprite and HE IS NOT MY FRIEND! He think I am but I am not. So don't worry about that dork. Anyway, this is a good story. Update soon.

Very nice story.

Try to expand on detail a little more. You want to have the reader picture the image you try to put in their minds.

I'm working on a Pokemon story as well. It's set in the Sinnoh Reigon. Check it out!

Nice start to a story. I'm working on one too. It's a crossover between Pokemon and Grossology (do you watch it?). Check it out sometime.