Very good fic, you write very well

please send a message when you do.

com plz

only thing that ** me off is we waited a long time and this isn't that long

good fic

Okay here we go. There were 2 (2)'s in your story and I am confused on which one is which. Your chapters are quite small, I would suggest expanding on something either scenery or fight scenes, you do not have to get elaborate but a little more length might be good. your second chapter had quite a few spelling mistakes. Your dialog could be expanded a little too. I do look forward to your next chapter. I hope I was able to help you with your writing. Please don't be discouraged by my review I do like your story line, I just see some room for improvement. I look forward to your next chapter.
RaiderXV...

This story has great potential. Please keep writing. :)

Impressive. More please.

good fic... nice pairing

well, if faced with an impossible choice like that, I'd choose my heart over the village every time.

besides, the two villages are being first class idiots, that relationship's as good a chance as any for peace talks.

it's the perfect opportunity, and, who better to make the initial peace offers than the two who are the most alike?

Well this should be interesting. rthe chapters are a little short for my liking but that's nothing to be concerned about.

update son