Sorry for not reviewing earlier. Anyway, the general plot seems all right, Ursa caught and traded and so forth, all to the good, though I am a little confused about some of the scenes. But that could be just me needing to pay closer attention. But there's a lot of details that I think could be improved. Point 1, Sea Life: Ships back then were generally cramped places to live. While it's not impossible someone could be running around for a while and not get caught, I don't think it would be for as long or in as many places as happens here.
Point 2, Anastastia is more a western name, which doesn't seem in keeping with the theme of Avatar.
Those are the main things. I still think you should keep writing, though.

So Ursa learning the hard way not to trust? Nice touch with the stealing ninja :)

I completely understand about the demands of real life, so don't think that you have to neglect schoolwork for your story. I won't be offended. About the chapter, it was entertaining enough, I think, though I'm not sure why over a hundred pirates would feel inclined to let five ninjas do anything. The ninjas' competence, or lack thereof, continues to amuse. Ursa seems fairly intelligent, though not all the time. I think if you have the time, the story is worth continuing.

Well a bit strange chapter, but I'm complaining because you updated at all. Please don't abandon this story. I want to know who and why is after Ursa.

Ursa's survival skills seem to be improving.  Poor woman has to steal to survive, but she can't be faulted for that.  I'm anxious to see how she'll deal with the pirates next chapter.  She's stuck, so she'll have to make the best of it!

I hope things improve on your end.  Take your time if you need to.

The team of pursuers is starting to develop nicely, they each have their own personality, even if most of them aren't too bright. Ursa's idea might be good in theory, but it sounds dumb in practice, especially if the trip lasts more than a couple days. The appearance of the pirates was mildly amusing, but it seems like it could have been just as easy to come up with another crew. Aside from that, a good chapter, though not a whole lot happened. I await the next installment.

Nice chapter and really cool ending. I look forward to read about the encounter between the Ninjas and the pirates :) I hope Ursa gets away in one piece.

Aw, I just love Ursa.  There are so many ways you can go with her personality and still be convincing.  At heart, she's a pacifistic, gentle woman -- but she'll fight when cornered.  You made that very clear.  And each time she reacted with violence, it hurt her.  She's very sympathetic, and I assume that's what you were going for.

While abusive!Ozai isn't my cup of tea, at least you made it clear that he truly loves Ursa.  He loses his temper, but the fact that you showed him being miserable without her was a way to further define his character, keeping him from becoming /too/ detestable.

The plot with Hama was very tense.  I figured Hama would eventually discover Ursa's identity and bloodbend her, but you wrote plenty of twists and turns in between.  Even the conclusion was surprising, so props to you for that!

I have no idea where Ursa will go from here; you have me in suspense.

The only thing that bothered me about this chapter is that the island where the black cliffs are located seemed a bit small on the map to support many predators. But that's not really important. Everything else was good. I think you got Iroh down well enough as he was at the time. I'm intriqued by your giving Ozai more humanity than he had in the show. Obviously this is years in the past, but it's still a nice touch. Sadly enough, what goes on here does seem like what a Fire Nation noblewoman would realistically go through in trying to live as a fugitive. As to your note, you're quite welcome.

Such lovely and sad chapter. I like the way you describe the royal family. Iroh... and Ozai who is missing Ursa...

Wow! Sorry I haven't been reading for awhile, I got caught up. (This is arelia-dawn, still...in case you've forgotten what with my long absence haha.)
Ah, Chapter 7. I love the reintroduction of Hama--you've definately kept her character as sinister and vengeful as it was in the show. (Ursa! Run away! There are no panda lilies! It's a trap!) I still love this story. =)

Sorry for not reviewing earlier, I've been a bit busy lately. Anyway, aside from her ax crazy side towards the Fire Nation, Hama seems a fairly sensible person. Why would she assume Ursa's rescue was part of some convoluted plan to kill or capture her? I suppose it could be just paranoia, but it doesn't quite seem to fit. And I was under the impression bloodbending was an all-or-nothing affair, either you're under the bender's control or you're not, not selective. I suppose you could have a different take on it, but with the complexity of the network of blood vessels in the body, I'm not sure it entirely makes sense.

I'm not entirely sure that the term 'ninja' would be appropriate. I've no problem with their existence, but they'd probably be called by a different name. Also, they seem a little too casual for people who I assume have had training for this kind of thing. Though I did enjoy thir banter. Some of the chapter did seem a little too similar to when Hama shows up in the show, but that isn't such a bad thing. Aside from that, it looks like things are going all right. Sorry if I seem to be focusing on the negatives, I just think you have a good concept here and I'd like to see it improve.

I think this has to be my favorite chapter so far. I love the conflicting feelings between Ursa and Ozai, and I love how seamlessley you entwined the dialogue from the show with your own storytelling. Oh, and I love how you show Azula wanting her mother's love, too--it gives her character much-needed depth. (You know...not straight evil.)

Very interesting chapter. I hope Hama won't hurt Ursa though.

Ooh, Ursa/Ozai conflict! I liked this chapter--you made Ozai very personable and even caring at some points, which made his character and his motives much more believable. I think it was a chapter back that you mentioned Ursa's father was Kuzon. Isn't he the kid Aang used to hang out with? (Correct me if I'm wrong, I totally forget some episodes lol.) Anyway, great chapter, sorry for the long review--wait, what am I saying, everyone likes long reviews! =)