AMAZING! The only good DarkObi-Wan fic I've read! The idea is awesome and Obi-Wan's power's are incredible! You should really continue it.

Wow, that was an amazing fic! I love dark Obiwan, especially in here where he is trying to fight it. I hope you get motivation to write more to this terrific fic!

First off I would like to say I liked the premise of the story but the tellin was slightly below par.Like for example the fact that Obi-wan seems to turn to the dark side in a matter of days, and limited character interaction and so on. Another matter that puzzles me is how quickly Qui-Gon guessed he was turning to the dark side.After all these are the jedi golden years, most of the jedi-turned-baddies appear after the phantom menace so there's really no reason qui gon would even suspect such a thing and as the EU shows us plenty a jedi have harbored dark feelings and not turned.I loved this story and it's premise but it feels rushed, like ten chapters in one, either you wrote this a while ago, or forgive me, you haven't improved much in your writing skills.The story's relentless like what a twelve year old would write.Sorry if this is basically one big critique but the rest of your writing was good just a bit too much like The Force Unleashed: great idea, bad,rushed presentation