Very, very good. Well-written, nice flow and a realistic portrayal of Nodokas thoughts, which I absolutely loved, by the way. :D

Especially the way you used Asunas line at the end, "Do you just not do dying, Honya?". Left a strong impression on the reader and made the whole story a bit... deeper, I guess.

Well, hope to see some more works from you in the near future.

So keep up the good work! :)