Congratulations for popping my Spider-Man Fanfic cherry! :D This is the first one I've ever read and to be honest I've never shipped Harry/Peter but this really was lovely. In a completely psychotic way. I can't say much about the characters because I have no idea how they behave in the third movie but I'll just pretend that this is really close to it. Without the buttsecks of course. And to be honest, who needs the third movie if they can have sex on a net? XDD To put it especially witty: You caught me in your web)

Overall, not too bad a one shot. :) First some slight criticisms - I had difficulty telling Harry's motivation throughout the story. Hard to tell if he was being malicious, confused, etc. Also, the action could get confusing sometimes (like is Peter's suit completely destroyed and if so, what's he wearing out to fight) and some details could be rearranged, like mentioning Harry being drunk earlier. And there are times when you shift tenses, between past and present.

That said, there were a lot of parts that I liked. The action between the two was nicely written, a good mixture of emotion and action especially in the part on the web. The characterizations sometimes seem all over the place but it doesn't jar the fic too much and both Harry and Peter seem in character if not entirely consistent.

There were a few lines in it that I really loved, in particular "You were mine before the Spider came." And I liked reading the fic as a whole. Good twist on an AU situation and it's always nice to see this ship getting some love. Definitely hope you write more in the future. :)

Very nice! I like where this is going, and its good to see you giving a new(ish) genre a go.
just one thing - first line I suspect you meant 'antique', not 'antic' dagger.
waiting for next part
-Dommy-