Mistakes/ What you could do better:
1º-you wrote "her finacée" which means she is planing to marry a woman; the correct way to say it would be 'finacé'(without the '-e')It's funny how you did write it correctly in the 2nd main summary... and then write it wrong again (in the 2nd chapter)!
2º-"as she layed on her back to faced him" correct form: face him

Comment:
Wow, and yes, I was a little 'disturbed'... :S But forgetting that, I like the way you avoid repeating words (like Jerry and fiancé) and I also like your style! Can't wait for you to continue the story.

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Braza0

&. I dont wanna close my eyes(dont wanna miss a thing) is the PERFECT song for elaine and jerry.
And no that timbit of sexual courtship was nothing!
You should see alot of the stories about elaine and jerry on here, that acually go in to detail about them doin it :P
it feels weird reading that type XD.

You've done a great job here, but the story (both chapters) was a little hard for me to follow. I felt like I had missed something prior to reading the first chapter. Overall, though... nice job!

verry entence,you really built thhese charecters,it sounds like elaine being herself always freaking out. every paragraph built a mentla picture in my head, amazing

Aw. That was cute. The ending was a little akward. ;)What happens next?

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE update it. I like it, alot. I hope it becomes a J/E story, there are never enough of those.