Gah.
D: Poor Naruto.

i thought i should probably re-read some of ur stuff and comment on some of them...
when i read most of it, i wasn't even registered here, so i didn't even know how to review
but now i do know, so i think it would be good to make the knowledge useful
and i decided to start with that story, because it was a very deep one in my opinion, and it touched my heart
in general all ur stories can find a way to my heart, somehow i really love ur style and the way u make me feel every single situation
it's like i was there and could see it with my own eyes
this is a gift raz, and thx for sharing it
(btw i've just changed nickname over here, but i hope u still know who i am - i've wrote to u on DA the first time a while ago)

T . T, i think i just broke the record time for crying. Your right about it being saddening except id say more like devastating. Thats just SOO depressive. the way the clone just disappeared right when...ug! im crying again dammit T.T anyways. Its due to your fantastic skills as an author in the first place that the story is so touching and saddening so awsome job, especially since it made me cry :)

aw :( this was so sad. i wonder what Naruto went through when he was with Jiraiya... this was prolly pretty accurate haha

lovingly sad

Ahh it hurts. T_T It was believable.

There were some sappy parts though that took away from the rest of it. Like the hole in the chest thing.

You were right; this was really sad. And really good.

The story was simple, but the idea of adding the clone was pretty unique. I kept thinking that maybe the clone was actually the real Sasuke...but that would've been too cliche. I really think you captured Naruto's character perfectly. I would imagine that he would've acted this way when he was training with Jiraiya. And the writing style was very good. You emphasized the right words and phrases, and it flowed very nicely.

All in all, thanks for the great read!

Wow!! That was sweet and sad. :) If only...
Thanks for the post!

Aw that was so sad. Poor Naruto so driven by his loneliness to henge into Sasuke, only to have his only clone be horrible to him. Goes to show he really does know what Sasuke is like doesn't he. He wasn't expecting Sasuke to show up and be nice to him :D

Oh. There it was. There was the hurt. That's where the piece of his heart went to.

GUH...~ That broke my heart. I can totally relate to the gut-wrenching feeling, and u describe them exactly how it is. it's beautiful!

I liked this very much. So sad and introspective and nicely written. Have definitely thought that Naruto would use the Kage Bunshin technique to help stave off loneliness and frustration with his inability to be near Sasuke. Imagine the possibility of overusing it as an extreme emotional crutch would be a possibility for him.

This is deep.

That was a amazing! Soo sad... And now I have to go to school.. I guess I'll just mope about... Your story was really very realistic. Like how Naruto would feel about the clone and stuff. It was really amazing. There will be more right? =w=

That was good. Very good. It was very polished. Don't quite approve of SasuNaru on principle, but that is a debate for another day. You didn't have a lot of action, but you had a lot going on, which is hard. I did notice a couple typos/awkward phrasings:
1.He sat cross-legged on a rock the size of a boulder.
A rock the size of a boulder is probably a boulder
2. Though where it came from he had no idea; he and Jiraiya had trekked quite far away from the mountains.
This didn't make sense to me. Why shouldn't there be boulders in the mountains? Also, starting the sentence like that is a bit awkward.
3.It warmed him like a caress as it feathered through his golden hair.
The golden was a little over the top
4.But then there were these times; when Naruto reflected with all his teenage wisdom about life.
Seeing as this was limited third person POV before, this sentence seemed aberrant in that it sounded more omniscient third person (like someone older observing and commenting on Naruto).

The rest was very, very good. I don't say that very often. Now I'm off to see what else you have.

oh! i remember this story! and there's a doujin out there too with a story line almost exactly like this one! hope u're not insulted or anything ^^; but really, it was an awesome doujin. if u want to read it, i think u can find it on arigatomina's naruto yaoi doujinshi page...

anyways, cute oneshot, as always, update soon again!