There's nothing wrong with this story in fact I think you did a good job capturing Neuro. It was a very nice story thank you for this!

I think you did awsome!! Please write more!!

I think you did perfectly characterizing Neuro. He wouldn't get all emotional over her being shot, but he would praise her for...evolving. xD Nice job anyway.

~Sora

First of all, let me start with: WOW!!
That was amazing, I like how Neuro is still so .. sadistic as always but still .. more nice.
You should definitly continue with this.
And MAYBE (just a maybe) add a litte Sasazuka x Yako to make it more.. entertaining. :)
But still!! Neuro x Yako are the best so Neuro should have her at the end (hahaha). Keep up the good work, I'm rooting for ya! :)

Eh, I like it so far. O: I can't state any full opinions though till I get to read more. Update soon! :D

i really love it! ^^

to wrote his personality well yo most understand that he a fine mix of shigure (fb manga), alchrad(SP) (hellsing), and hiei.

I still love it! Neuro and Yako are so cute together!

Wow, wonderfully done! You got all of their personalities right on! Very nice oneshot! I hope you write more!

i liked that! awesome oneshot! ur right, i've never really tried to keep Neuro perfectly in character since my friend and i have a total crackfic, but he's hard to write IC!

You did really well. :D

Neuro was expressed very within his character. While we have yet to see a situation in the manga where Yako actually gets critically injured, I think this was interpreted nicely.

Continue to write moar. :)

- Aiiro Hoshi

Very nicely done, i thought you did really well! I know Neuro is hard to write (like i told another author, i've never tried to write him myself, but my brain nearly exploded just thinking about it), but you pulled it off quite nicely. The only thing i'm upset about is that this is a one-shot XD

~Akiko