Despite how some people are just morons, you should feel honored that at least she understands her inferiority to you, as shown when she refers to you as a deity.

"...She only posted cause she was tired of me not updateing so get a life God."

Yeah God, get a life geez. Oh wait. Maybe that was just bad grammar. ; )

I just had to point that out, and I hope you get as much of a laugh out of it as I did. As sucky as it is that this happened to you, remember that you have faithful readers (not to mention an understanding of the English language lol ) and that is more than she probably ever will. Your writing is awesome, so don't let some idiot get you down. : )

I'll look forward to seeing more from you.

Sorry if I just sent you this...my computer is NOT cooperating with fanfiction right now. I loved your story! Sorry to hear about the whole stealing and crapp. Some people need a life and shouldn't be idiots. The origional is awesome!:)

Even though that paragraph(s) were only to excuse the AN It was pretty sweet.

I feel really bad for you about that person stealing your work. I mean honestly, that was just cruel.

okay...i totally agree with you

For what it's worth, the phony's chapter seems to have been taken down. I swear, I hate people sometimes.

Oh wait, chapters shouldn't be used for authors notes? lol I read the rules too, but I ignored it for Beyond. I mean, come on, I wasn't gonna put a three page author's notes at the beginning of a 13,0 word chapter, and I sure as hell wasn't going to kill the mood of the epilogue with it either.
I support you all the way, girl! I've been the victim of plagiarism before. It ain't fun.

Oh my, you're handling this much more civily than I would, and for that I applaud you. I was thinking I'd read the same story before when I'd read BondSlave's; it just didnt't click. Sorry about that. I actually liked the "chapter" x3

*jawdrop* Me? A semi-inspiration?! *squeals in delight* Thank you! I'm really honored!
This is your first lemon? Well, it was rather good for a first time. Much better than mine. I only say that because whenever I write them, I end up chickening out and combine it with some other event happening simultaneously so I don't have to commit full attention to it. lol
It's really all about getting comfortable with it, and you're doing great so far. For me, I usually write something as best as I can then go back and edit before posting. However, with lemons, I just write them in their final form the first time (with lots of planning and such ahead of time) so I don't have to go back and edit it and start second guessing myself. I don't know how embarrassed you get about writing them, but I know I get quite shy, so I usually just write it and let it go.
As far as the storyline goes, I thought it moved a little too quickly and the rationale for it kind of got lost in the shuffle. Mello seemed to transition far too swiftly from anger to lust and perhaps adding in some aggression or hesitation in his behaviors might help remedy this. However, that's always a little more difficult to do with a dominant Matt.
Overall, I thought it was nicely written and a good first try at a lemon. Next time, though, you may want to slow down the course of action a little bit and take some time to reason it out with the characters.
Great job! I can't wait to see more from you!

i like this story b/c its true sex makes everyone happier its just the cure the to a bitchy person!

funny its funny

Simple errors:

He tugged at the bottom of Matt's shirt, putting it upwards.

^meant pulling


He goes back his assault on Mello's mouth, while his hands find

should be:

He (went) back (to) his assault on Mello's mouth, while his hands (found)

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Hope that helped. Now a review! Good job. If you didn't tell me that was your first lemony story, I wouldn't have known :D Well done!

Makes me feel pervy to when I try to write mine... XD Good work with this story... Mello is in character for once... Usually people don't make him that angry... ^^ it's a good thing.

Pretty amazing for your first lemon. I too hope to see you surpass your limits, because this was pretty good. Sex isn't everything, of course, but it's a nice talent to be able to write either way. And rookie or not, this was good.

Well I think we all feel a little perverted when writing lemons, but it's fun so who cares right? Yay sex! You did a good job, and the limits, well, they just kind of...float away after awhile. Yea.