...Just...wow.

If you do not update this ASAP I swear, I'll throw a blood-thirsty Apollo at you! Yes, vampires are overdone, but with new situations, characters, and non-Dracula stuff, it could be AWESOME. Which it already is really good. Please update and make it violent! (sorry for being so evil, it's in my genes)

Oh, and btw, for the 2nd chapter, 'Your Perfect'? Your perfect what? It's you're if that's what you are going for.

What was the name of the thing that Apollo was eating?

Please update XD it seems like an interesting story XOO

*.* saems interesting XD

Oh ok I missed the part where you said you didn't know what to make the monster ^^; the loophole cleard that up, still I'm up for anything. Well I'll just wait and see what great chapter will come next XD

I'm actually liking this story ^^ and I only just found one vampollo that was good so I really hope to see Apollo lose it or something in this one XD Good job!

O MY GOD! I love this! What's gunna happen next? What's gunna happen to Polly? Please, Please update!

Ack! Polly! XD
How will his live his life now?
This chapter was good! Short as the first one but if you work on it at school, then I understand.
That was a smart idea by saying he's a monster, not a vampire. I love the quote, too!
And by demons I was thinking like a Laharl sort-of demon, 'cuz you know Apollo has a red-scarf and all. A vampirish, human-like demon?
Well I'm just here to say that, this chapter was good. As for errors... none that I can see. You don't have to add the 'more' after 'What really scared Apollo...' Sure it might be no big deal, but i'm just that kind of nerd with the highest grade in my English class... And yes, I called myself a nerd. xDD
I can't wait for the next chapter.

Love the chapter, keep up the good job

and I love the concept of the supernatural monster, I rarely come across any good fan fictions like this.

=D

Interesting concept.

Few things though:

1. You'll get more review if you turn off the anonymous review disabler.

2. Double-space. Please. It's annoying when the enter button's only hit once when it sould be hit twice.

Interesting. You should maybe put thoughts into italics, its a bit easier to understand. The idea seems nice, but a vampire story seems far too overdone. Maybe you could switch it to another monster that sucks blood? Like making one up, it'll seem more original that way. :)

Oh, wow! I think you've captured the characters well. =]
Now I want to know what happens next! But... should it be a vampire? Like you said a whole bunch of vampire stuff came out. But then again you could make it more interesting in your own way.
Hmm... How 'bout you make Polly into a demon of some sort? He starts to despise humans and he has like magical power and the sort. I was sorta thinking of Disgaea of the time and this just randomnly popped up in my head. =) I hope I was helpful~!