T.T it's so sad and goory and creepy and completely divine.

I really really like this story, it is so horrible and yet really cute. You had me in tears in the end... :< Perhaps a prologue will come? XD

That was, well, whoa, gory? XD I love how you don't need to write a beginning, a complete background, for it to make perfect sense. It's far more interesting that way anyway. Keeps a bit a mystery but without being confusing.
I love that they both die, of course, as one can't go without the other.
oh I remarked a small mistake: "tightened it's grip painfully hard." it should be "tightened its grip painfully hard." no? ^^
Hum, I admit I grimaced a little at the "I loved you. Far more than you knew. You were like a brother to me" the "brother" part seems unnecessary, people can interpret it the way they want, and thinking of Leon and Cloud as brother kinda ticks me off ^^;;.
Other than that, great job, though I do hope next one will be more..lighthearted. Another chapter of "nurse nurse" would be great too XD though I guess it's not /that/ light-hearted recently XP

I did not expect the ending. I thought that the both were sworn enemies from the start and then I thought Leon was trying to save the world by killing Monster!Cloud but then the end was so sad :( Cloud didn't know any better but...D8

The descriptions were amazing and what I particularly liked about it was that it was as if I was reading one of those crazy graphic comics where the blood is everywhere and its all so in slow motion like "making the top-half of his body immediately shoot forward and buckle, blood flying through the air". I guess the way you began, with the whole city void of colour except for Cloud's golden hair was reminicsent of Sin City.

You have a good talent at writing action scenes; some people can't do them and you kinda have to fight through the vegetation as a reader to get to the end of it and find out where its actually going. With you, I enjoy reading the action as it all unravels in my head and plays out like a arty bloody violent film.

You like your gore, don't you? :P Muchas Gracias for the read :)

This is so sad! I cried a little after reading this, I loved it, the way you defined how they fought, how they looked like, and what their connection was. Kudos



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Wow, I loved the emotion in it. Though, for someone like me who faints at the sight of blood and description of wounds, all the gore made me queasy,but that's my fault for reading, though Im really glad I did. x) Great job. Such a sad story. =(

I...just...I think I'm in shock. A lot of shock. Oh my god.

Very nicely written...very tragic. Way to counter all the fluff circulating around out there. lol. That was Armeggedon-esque. *sniffles* My poor boys...so much blood and gore and violence...and not the good kind of violence. Although I wouldn't read if I weren't interested. :D

T_T Poor Cloud! It's always Cloud and Leon who can't catch a break. Always. What a bittersweet story. It was, indeed, a bit weepy at the end, because you didn't know why Leon was hunting Cloud until the end.

Lovely.