Loved your display of vocabulary, i felt like i was reading something new, fresh (it probably feels that way becaus ei only recently got into Star Wars) but i never thought of Kit's name being a child's name. It's kind of...cute. It had powerful family importance undertones and was warmly touching, to see Kit pursue and save a family member.

great detail, and well thought out storyline. love your characterization of Ventress, it seems very in character for her!

^_^

An excellent story. I enjoyed reading every minute of it. Also, I liked the idea of having it only three chapter, but their longevity and intensity compensate for the overall story shortness. Kudos to you.

regards Skykhanhunter

Wow, nice action in this story, and great use of humor from Yoda at the end, and I didn't know Kit's name was a generic name for a baby of his species before a name could be thought of. :)

Another great chapter. I think you have done a great job here, with both Kit and Quinlan. Quinlan is a darker jedi than most, in his speech and in his demeanour. Good portrayal of him in this fic.

regards Skykhanhunter

Nicely done! I imagine I know less about Vos Quinlan than you do, but it's interesting about his psychic impression Force ability.

Great chapter though I would like to know what happens next.

Good work. I like Kit Fisto in this, as I find him a great character everywhere. He works well in this, despite his familiarity with the parents he never gives himself away. Excellent, keep writing.

regards Skykhanhunter