A good written story with deep feelings. I cannot say a thing but GREAT ! Maybe it can become Riviera II: The Search of Ein or something...

This is a very cool story. I tell you that. But I couldn't help but feel that Fia is out of character.

It was a nice read, but I never got to finish the game. I was so close, but ended up getting stuck or something. Now I am determined to go beat the game when I read this story, Dear Girls, however I will have to restart it again. It amusing, considering that Lina is one of my favorite characters. Fia seems a little OOC, but overall it was a favorite in the Riveria section.

I do so much love the writing in this.

The little details of life without Ein, and the fleshing out of the ladies, are extremely well-done. Sting has just confirmed that Rose's ending is the canon end to Riviera (although whether it's the good or bad one, they haven't said), but even without knowing that, this story just makes sense. Of course Ein would have too many questions to just stay put in Riviera. (Don't we all...) Of course he still has trouble trying to please everyone. That's what he does.

Of course Fia wants to know more, and to find him. Lina's characterization is perfect, too. And Cierra, and Serene. I like the way the story starts out with Fia feeling left out by them, too. It sets off the restless, sort of empty mood perfectly.

Love this fic. Love it. You are much better at this writing thing than you realize, dear. :

Hey hey, a new Riviera fic from you! And much better than the last two you did, the ones titled... um... gee, I could have sworn you had at least two earlier Riviera fics... I even mention them in a review for one of your Yggdra Union stories...

Anyway, this is a pretty nice piece. Rather random, as they say, but it's good to get a look through Fia and Lina's messy rooms. The characters' feelings for each other are handled very well, never expressed too bluntly, and I like how Lina decides they're going after Ein at the end. A perfect example of the little kid's reckless spontaneity.

Only two problems. First, you refer to Ein as "the last surviving grim angel", but the game strongly implied that there are many other grim angels in Asgard.

Second, Fia's reasoning for not going after Ein if he doesn't come back is blatantly out-of-character, given that she made the opposite argument very shortly after her introduction in the game. And though that's the only OOC spot, her dialogue in general doesn't sound like her at all. A good example is "Lina, are you crazy? I can't picture Fia ever using a rhetorical question of that nature.

Still, fairly pleased with this piece overall. Your writing is as fluid and emotionally strong as ever. I've been wanting to read another of your stories for a while now, so I'm glad the opportunity came my way.