You make Goten a perfect 7-year-old energetic (really energetic) child and then you give him some really insightful thoughts to throw at Satan. They contradict each other in my opinion.

Also if you are going to make any character OoC you should mention it. If you weren't then here is kinda out of it. Sure he has his sensitivities (as shown later in the manga/anime with Fat Buu) but I doubt he would express them like that

Again a little OoC (Gohan and Videl, Satan; you nailed him
Why has Gohan accepted to ask for money from Satan when he won't from Bulma and we all know that she won't have any trouble or problem with it?

man great story and you should make an epilogue it'll make more sense

Cute story. Still feel like you left out a lot of details as to why they were in the situation to start with.

Is there a reason the super rich Bulma isn't supporting them while she is in the hospital? I think that there should be a reason. You really need to state it in your story to make this fanfic more believable. ei bankruptcy maybe.

Very Good chapter. Can't wait to see Satan soften up to Goten.

YAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAY! BEST FIC EVER!

Aw this story is so great! I luved it_ Its going on my favorites section! Great awesome teriffic job!

I like your story but...it has plot-holes...like the fact the world martial arts tournament doesn't happen every year and that Gohan should have a bit more strength in him but I guess it's because of the emotional drain...I still can't fathom as to why Bulma can't give Gohan the money or why he and Goten can't just simply live their while Bulma takes care of everything or why Goten couldn't come along in the family trip since Bulma and Goku always seemed to act like Siblings in Dragonball

That was GREAT! The whole thing was well planned out and very well written. Please continue such good work! I especially loved the entire dragon ball hunt with Goten. It reminded me alot of the original series 'Dragon Ball' and the hunts with Goku. Though, I only saw up to half way through his second hunt, it was still very much like it. You kept everyone very well in character, even Hercule. This is a great story! I can't wait to see what you come up with next. Also, a epilogue would be nice, maybe with Goku talking through King Kia (spelling?) telling his sons that they did a good job, Gohan for holding things together as well as he did, and Goten for ultimetly helping heal his mother. Also maybe having a talk with Videl. This story rocks! Keep up the good work! See ya! (puts story on favorites list.)

so sweet!

Truly fantastic! I loved it. Please write more DBZ stories.

*blinkblink* A squirrel? Oh well. i love this story.

This is really cool! I'm glad Chi Chi is ok!

This story was as good as the prequal. I hope you do a sequal to this one too. Maybe throw Erasa and Sharpener into the mix, but it's p to you. Anyway, good writing.