aww!

it's really funny!

thanks

Em

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i would love 2 adopt the story if u would be my betta reader?

hahahahahaha!

I enjoyed that WAY better. Thanks for the URL to the song. I'm a big silly songs fan, and I've heard the song before, but I wouldn't have been able to conjure it up in my head alone.

ha! singing!

still laughting...

ohh funny

I like it, but can you make the chapters longer? maybe explain what bella is seeing, where she is, the backstory, etc. i know what is going on due to your summary, but if i hadn't read it, i probably wouldn't understand at all. i also agree with the other person, music would be nice! i know that is hard for us who aren't composers, (i can't compose a note to save my life, so if you can't, i wont be mad) but it might add a bit more depth. funny concept, though! keep it up, can't wait to read more.

:)

I think it would be better if I had a song in my head to go with it...something silly like Bohemian Rapsody by Queen.