write more!

Aw this chapter was so cute! ^_^ I normally don't like SasuNaru, but I liked the way you did it. My fav part was when Naruto was thinking about how the world was like television and how he liked watching people. This part was funny hah:

“Uchiha Itachi.” Itachi reached out to acknowledge the introduction and looked at his little brother from over the blond’s shoulder. “I think you were trying to win more than just his heart, Mr. Uzumaki.”
Naruto grinned broadly. “Well, I was trying to, until you interrupted us.”

Awesome story, this is definitely going on my favs! :D

Haha Shikamaru, attorney? Never saw that coming. If Naruto was a doctor, I would shoot myself before going to him xD
Anyways, I loved this chapter! These parts had me rofling haha:

“Eh…” Kisame blinked before twisting around to face the younger man. “I have a feeling karma has just kicked your **.”


Itachi looked up at his lover incredulously and snorted. “Yeah, I’m sure.” He sat up again and took off down the hall toward his brother’s room. His voice echoed down through the apartment as he drew further away from the living room. “Sasuke, your big brother is home! Come to my bosom and let me take care of you.”

“What the hell!” Sasuke exclaimed, horror lacing his tone.

Awesome job, I like the idea of this story and the way it's written. ^_^

This story sounds really good so far! I absolutely love this pairing; KisaSasu. Too bad there's not that much of it. Lol I liked this part:

“Pet,” Kisame grinned lecherously. “Like with a leash and collar that says ‘**’ on the tag?”

Gonna go read the other chapters now!

SO CUTE!! OMG I LOVE THE CRACK!! :D

I love the epilogue. :D KisaSasu was a bit different, ne? Naruto sure has a dirty mouth, don't he ... xD

A happy ending!

YAY!

...

Naruto has a scooter!

YAY!

Tobi loved the whole park scene(wait a minute, wasn't that the whole chapter?!), and he often looks at people like that too. Tobi randomly places himself in other people's head, and then thinks of how they see the world from their viewpoint.

Kisame seems to be a pretty tight-lipped fellow.(I'd know.) He's better on drugs though ^_^

Tobi thinks his favorite thing about this whole story is that there are only five people in it. That's just makes it easier for a writer to develop their characters that much more.

Anyway, thanks for this nice distraction in Tobi's life, he really needed it!

-Tobi-kun

p.s. KisaSasu ftw!

Tobi is choking from the amout of blood that is flowing from his nose into his mouth. ~gags~

Anyway, Tobi wants to say that he thinks this is perfect!
The smooth way of writing that possesses you is just amazing, amazing!

Now Tobi wants to be an RN heehee! Tobi can see those little seeds of goodness you planted in that hospital scene.

Anyway, Tobi was very, he means VERY, impressed with the lemon here. It made Tobi jump for joy.(Unfortunately, he forgot about his computer desk, so now his legs hurt.) Sasuke was perfect! Tobi means perfect!! And Kisame...awesome! And Sasuke and Kisame...Oh no, Tobi's nose is bleeding again T_T

And then, Itachi had the best line out of the whole chapter: "Come to my bosom and let me take care of you." Tobi laughed so hard that unfortunately, the plugs he put in his nose came out and it started bleeding again...

Anyway, onto chapter three!

-Tobi-kun

I CANNOT believe that I am the first person to review your story!! It is a tragedy unlike the world has ever seen!!

Tobi is very impressed. He saw that his Sasuke was paired with his good friend Kisame, and he just had to investigate. Who've thought he'd find a treasure like this? Definitely not Tobi.

Anyway, Tobi is oof to read the next chapter, where he will review again!

-Tobi-kun