omg...

never before have i seen this much metal in a fan fiction 8l





*dies*

Fucking metal-est story ever.

Epic winz to you.

This is one main reason i go to fan fiction. to re read this story. Toki Wartooth is my favorite band member of Dethklok
1.Toki
2.Murderface
3.Skwisgaar
4.Pickles
5.Explosion

OMJ.
That is one of the most moving things I have read in a long time.
It made me laugh, cry, and then fangirl squeal because of how much I love Toki.
seriously, not many stories have made me actually GUESS about the outcome.
most stories like these are just bland and depressing until their entirely-too-predictable, uninteresting, endings.
You have renewed my faith in the modern-day Cinderella story, and in modern-day writers in general.
In other words, LOVED IT!

That was very clever XD

That... was pretty damn awesome. XD
I loved the whole concept of it-- and how Skwisgaar was the one most affected by "Mjolner's" disappearance. Ah...
And the writing style was really quite amusing. The one point where I literally choked on my laughter was that cheese simile-- "his hair as golden as cheese."
I... don't know why. But it struck me as very funny. ^_^

I was cracking up reading this! You are truly talented!

As a critique:
Hehe. I vaguely surprised that something this cute was written as a Dethklok story. Lets see, your spelling was perfect, for the most part. Your paragraph structure was one of the better I've seen. You went into some amount of detail and thats perfect for fanfictions.

Grade: B+

Personally:
Wowwee! I want to see more of this.
I know that once someone decides not to continue a story any longer or just want one chapter, then they wont change their mind, but I really wish you would!
Good luck with other projects!

Tro
:D

Masterful. I say this 100% sincerity.

OHMYGOD I love you.
That was possibly one of the most epic things I've read on this site. Everyone was kept in character and a little background story on Toki is always nice. Your humor was grade A and I lol'd the whole way through, even reading some parts out loud to myself. XD

Whee~! :3

Poor Toki... Makes me really glad his dad met such a gruesome end. XD