Awesome chapter! =D

sorry for the late review...

great chapter~~ i loved it a lot~

love always
hisanachan

wonderful story! Update soon plz!

wow! i love this story! update asap!

I rwally like this so far. Keep it up. I can't wait for the next chapter!

lol takishimas parents are crazy~~

love always
hisanachan

Ahh...I can tell you read a lot of fantasy. :)This seems to be well plotted. Gambate on the next few chapters!

I enjoyed this story very much! The beginning was a bit rocky because the audience probably wasn't aware that this was an Alternate Universe fic. I suggest embellishing on more of the descriptive words perhaps. Not so much as describing clothes or things like that, but using words that have a broader or more specific syntax that can describe that event or person. I don't know what kind of story you want to write, but it seems that you have a preference for describing the event instead of using the characters' speech. I would suggest to incorporate more speech, but in a way that is subtle and with, of course, the embellishment on words. I hope that this review is helpful and I cannot wait for the next chapter to come out!