I'm glad this was the first Princess Mononoke fic I chose to read all through; it's rather intriguing.

I like that you developed the relationship of Ashitaka and San without having them be totally in love with each other already (even after a year). It perfectly fits with my vision of their lives post-film, so kudos for that!

Also, wonderful characterization of all characters. I love when people get it right.

And I want to comment on more but I can't think of anything. For now, I look forward to the next update. :)

It took me two days to read this Story you made(Work and such where the problem).

If you made the Chapters a little longer.

You could at some point make it a little more sinister, like some plot twist that the enemy is not the true enemy. Stuff like that.

Overall, I'll give it a good Five out of Ten.

Keep going with this, it might wind up being on my top ten most read Story's on Fanfiction.

/s/5324109/1/Two_Worlds here is the full link sorry about that! :D

I think they are native Americans. Cuz they said that they got cursed. Which could have been small pox exposed tot he when English came over seas. Also since you are a great Writer i was wondering if you would read my story? her eis the link /s/5324109/1/Two_Worlds
It has a good plot also. Only problem is that only one person has read it so far. I would like to get your opinion of it. Email me at or post something on the story once you read it :D

Intresting chapter. They are ready to go then. And a little SanXAshitaka to keep us going. Its so cute when she doesn't understand what the feeling is. YOU LOVE HIM YOU SILLY GIRL!
There was on thing I noticed butI assume its just a typo. When San came bak into the room you said she glanced "wearily" behind her, but that means tired. Did you mean "warily"?

So why do you feel 'bleh' about this chapter? As far as I'm concerned the plot is running smoothly, the characters are STILL very much themselves and all in all you're doing a cracking job, it's not praise i often give. There might be a little bit too much expression of the mouths and perhaps we could have a little closer look into people's thoughts and perspectives which tends to give some more gravity to a situation (maybe between Asano's son and San) so that you don't have to play with faces to make up for space (although i like the bit about the spilled tea), but hey, you have a very easy style, mine's a bit heavier-going so don't take it too seriously what I'm saying.

Cool story! Please update soon!

alrighty i just finished your princess mononoke story and i wanna read the next chapter! please write it! you got me hooked and you're an amazing writer.

Does it seem familiar? Damn I need to watch the movie again, its been a while or was this in the fic? On that note...Hello! Where have you been? Its good to get an update XD Thought maybe you had poofed into non-existence.
Loving that little frission of tension between San and whatsit-Adara! That's the name. Plus the little arm link moment.
Just a thought, I think that they would have seen sand before, on the bank of rivers and on the banks of iron town. Maybe not in vast quantities but enough that they wouldn't need it explaining.

Amazing!
This story is very well written, and has a great plotline. I love how you keep all the characters the same, like San and Ashitaka's attituides. Many people make San nice and bubbly, and I like how you still keep her short-temperness. Keep writing! I look forward to your next chapter.

Snowcloud

More, More, More I have fallen in love with this story.

It's so funny seeing San jealous and she doesn't even realize it herself.

Hey I've just read ch. $ and I think this story is great! Thank's for keeping with the character's personalities. Keep up the good work!!

Well, given to how many people follow your story and, believe you me, it's a good one, i think you might be compelled to give us the ending. The only time you stop is when you think going on further will compromise the quality of the story.
Well done on your research, most of the stuff was bang on.
By the way, as i mentioned before, the way you maintain the integrity of the characters is brilliant and i actually owe you some thanks, I was doing an assessment for film studies (how does PM and Spirited Away reflect japanese culture) and you helped with that.
Remember to keep a firm eye fixed on where the story is going.
Regards
I&C

You shouldn't be so afraid to have longer chapters, that's it.

This is good. You kept the characters in mind, that's actually rarer than you think, you kept their goals, morals and key characteristics firmly where they should be but your plot doesn't suffer for it, well done.