Wow... the details and emotions in this peice are just simply stunning. I am actually speechless. You did a wonderful job with this story, and I love the way you use imgery to appeal to the senses and the amount of emotion is absolutly brilliant. Great work with this!!

Personally, I think this is a great piece of writing you have, and I think that you captured Soul's character excellently.

How often did you have to refer to the chapter where this took place?

Oh! Love it!
Kinda dark but it was still good!

wow, this really sounded like it was from the manga itself. I could really see all the weapons having an internal urge to go to the 'mother' of them all.(and poor soul is the first to be near her)
the bitter-sweet vibe is the one thing that gave the one-shot it's flavor though. Just by reading it you could imagine yourself as a weapon, and be urged to reach out to her. (gawd it gives me this awsome goose bump feel inside!)
and for your TEH story. I don't think you need to change much, I know the whole soul and his brother thing might rock the boat alittle but I'm sure you could make up some sort of angst momment intereaction( like he comes back home from a far off boarding school to find soul and be overly jelous cause he was able to be a scythe so quickly. you know, that sorta thing) but thats just a fan giving her opinion, cause I know how annoying it is to have to start over from a major character background issues.
hope you update soon!^^