very good story, although I tend to like stories more centered on actually characters rather then OC's. and one of the other reviewers is correct, you need either spell check and really good beta or something.

you're writing is good, would be better if you fix the spelling, misused words in future stories..they can get distracting.

Woot! Excellent chapter! Wow! This guy is spooky!

This is a great story! I am enjoying thoroughly! But you seriously need a spell checker, my friend. While some of these words are spelled right they are misused

a doctor heals, the heels of your feet

a trader trades goods or items, a traitor betrays you

This story is imaginative, exciting, innovative and mysterious! :)

Morgan still has a problem? He will get his comeuppance then! hee hee Excellent beginning! Interesting and exciting!

Just one thing I didn't notice the first time I read this one: Marine Corps boot camp is 16 weeks long.

Very cool. I loved this show growing up. Even have two copies of the entire series on DVD including the pilot movie.

Wow. This got good. Great job. I hope there is more?

Another great chapters to this story. More please. I wanna see what happens to Matt and his brother and don't make them die. Don't stop...

Man this is great. keep going. Don't stop.

I loved this show. I also love that they have a little sister. Do you have anyting in stories of how and

what it was like when they were kids?

Keep going please. MORE!