I liked this. Your discription and storytelling technique are both great. I would be curious to where else you could take the story. My only critique is to not end a story with "The End"- any work should wrap up nicely on it's own and not need explanation that it is the end.

But good job! Keep writing :)

-L. Anne Mathisen

That was a good take on Christian. You have him down pretty well.

hope you do more of this..I really like it. Christian does have a certin "type" he usually goes after, but I'd think an exploration into others would be good for him. Not to say it would change him, but it would be a nice experience for him...thanks so much for posting this.