Nice! I'd love to read more.

great keep it up and post more wicked soon, rock on! peace:)

that was really amazing.. I held my breath during the poem.. I loved it... really good!

Oh, I'm intrigued... do continue. :P pretty pretty please? Poor Shego... this is obviously upsetting for her. :(

For your first fic, that was pretty damn good! I like the concept and hope you continue.

It was nice. Nice and light. Fun to hear what the dissenting voices in their heads had to say. I'm taking this is near the beginning of Season 4?

The Power Tower is the major wall between them, when Kim spoke words of hate in response to finding out that her "love" was a fake, then she pendulumed the opposite way to the safety of Ron. So now has to come the reason why they still feel so strongly about each other. Not the easiest of tasks.

Of course, not really needed for light stories either! (sorry, I think in terms of deeper context... a flaw of mine)

Bottom line, I'd like to read more.

LR

what I'm thinking?

wow, just wow

MORE! This was really good, I love the build up you have going...I so want to read the next chapter :D

this is real good. update soon

ooh ooh ooh! more please and soon. its lovely. please and thank you

kitty _

really liked it, poem was great, totally works for shego. hope it does get continued!

Well then poetry and Shego in the same sentence? weird... still a good Kigo is hard to find so I'll continue to read just because I'm curiois how things will end up.

Invader Johnny Signing Off.

woho ok im hooked.. waiting on bated breathe for the next chapter...

Cute. Not revolutionary, but cute. Which is fine.

There are three complaints I have:

1) I'm not a fan of the "Both girls have secret feelings for each other" Kigo trope. It's well-done here, so I'm not too put off by it, but it always just seemed way too convenient to me.

2) I'm a bit OCD about grammar and spelling, so I feel duty-bound to point out that there are a few mistakes in here on those fronts.

3) The poem was... it was a nice idea. However, the hero metaphor felt pretty strained by the end, and it all read a bit too pop song-y to me. That'd be fine if there was music to go with it, but there's not, obviously. I don't think it's a truly awful poem (I've read MUCH worse, believe me), I just think it's kinda amateur hour/high school, dig?

It wouldn't be too much of a problem for me, but for the fact that you have Kim weeping and saying how beautiful it is by the end of it. Not only does that come off as kind of arrogant on your part (unintentionally, I'm sure), but it also weakens the believability of the piece as a whole, because it makes Kim seem like she has, well, low standards. Not that she doesn't, what with the Ron thing, but... XD

Anyway, besides those things, it's pretty darn good.

Overall, I think you have a fine first effort here, and I have a feeling you'll soon become someone to watch around here. In the meantime, I look forward to the next chapter.

Cheers! :D

Hey, I must say that for your first fan fic that it is really good. I love it. You should definetly continue this story...you have me intrigued and that is a hard thing to do sometimes lol :) anyway it was good keep up the good work.