 The Laughing Phoenix 2008-11-18 . chapter 1This was very very good. I like how you condense everything the Naruto characters are into a few short sentences. I will admit, I had to read some of them a couple of times before they made sense (specifically: We are life. We choose those who live, those who die. Those that we love, those that we compete with.) However, since I'm running on far too little sleep, that's as much a measure of how my mind isn't working as anything else.
Keep writing.
-Phoenix. |