Wow. Awesome piece! I shivered at Raven's flashback. Brr...that Alexei is so darn creepy sometimes.

Yes, Rita is rather violent, but hey, that's how she really is anyway! You made a pretty good point in this story, since it's not the world that he loves. XD

Keep up the good work!

Ravita has never been my ship--I usually avoid it--but you actually make it work. Good job. :)

Rita's violent and that's how we love her! lol you did a great job with this, wouldn't change a thing!!

Ok, so Rita is my favorite character, but through out the game I just really couldn't 'agree' on any sort of pairing for her.

YurixRita was out of the question as he's too Batman for Rita. KarolxRita is probable but 1.) I hate Karol and 2.) He has Nan
EstellexRita/JudithxRita I can see it but i don't prefer it.

And at first RavenxRita seemed kinda out there. The age difference was one huge gap that i thought could be over looked, but I saw Rita as a little naive, let alone able to see past his perversions, but you managed to counter all of those in this fic, and actually gave me a reasonable, LIKEABLE, pairing for Rita.

Kudos. Definitely favoriting

To tell you the truth, it's the tenth time I read this, and it seems I noticed just this time that I didn't left you any review.

This story is pretty good, and Rita IS violent. Please, if you have another vesperia fic to release PM' me. :D

I can't say anything except I loved it and it seemed absolutely perfect.

I believe that one reasons as to why Rita x Raven fanfic's have sort have blossomed as MoonlitInuko said to what I believe anyways, it is actually possible that Rita could beat the Old Man into shape. I love Raven's personality, yet when I head about his past (I almost cried) I kinda wish he would well...mature. The state that he's in is sorta of like 'he's doing all that he can to move on and forget the past.' or 'Raven's in an state of I don't know what to do with myself and I miss Cassy I need Cassy around to boss me around.'

Raven; -sighs- "yea.. I don't know anyone like that..."

Rita just opens her self to everyone in Brave Vesperia yet if Raven didn't act the way that he did she would have more respect for the Old lovable coot.

I really ate this Fanfic up.
Well written, when Raven fell to his knees I really did feel that Rita was really going to 'KILL HIM!' and in the literal sense too. Call me what you will, but thanks to you I'm all for Raven getting kicked and stomped on by Rita 'I want her to do that to m..NO-NO NEVER HAHAHA WHAT ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT!!'...really is an turn on for me, so that was an plus.

Again thank you for taking time out of your life to create this gem of an Fanfic, I'll be checking back to your account for that sequel.

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You did a good job creating this fic. And no, your Rita wasn't too violent. Any reasonably sober woman would hit him like that if persuaded enough to. And the line 'my heart only beats for you.' is also in the the My Heart by Paramore. Just so you know!
LATM

Not a fan of the pairing or the Raven angst, but LOVE the way you write Rita. Raven needs more verbal beatings, anyway.

Interesting, They stayed in character, the idea is alittle... raw. Bit i liked it over all.

I'm not really a fan of this pairing, simply because I cannot see where the heck it came from, considering alot of people seem to like it...but its an interesting pair to read about I must say.

But anyway, I liked this story, it was very poignant, and very well written, I must admit something about it really hit well with me. Good imagery, and good story flow, I loved the end about blending the two parts of the whole that is Raven. Ill be looking forward to seeing a possible sequel.

I loved the story! =]
"please don't hit me again. I like my face." Love that line. xD

Hmm, I have to say that was excellent. I certainly loved how you gave Raven such a conflicted soul. The battle between the dead soldier Schwann and the philandering coot was well done, though I would have preferred a bit darker of a conflict.

You also were able to channel both Rita and Raven very well. I am glad you avoided making a gushy Rita. As for Raven, it seemed you were able to reach right into the game and yank out all his darkness that he kept bottled up (oh how I wish they would have gone deeper into his past than they did). I especially love the question posed in the second line: "is it still possible to sin after one has died?" That was pure gold in my opinion and has actually spurred my own ideas for a ToV fic, though probably not a long one.

Finally, while I do not really like the idea of Raven and Rita paired, you were able to handle it quite nicely. Despite my feelings towards such a pair, I still salute your writing ability and wish you the best of luck.

*glee*

Love Rita, and LOVE Raven in this!

Fave lines:
'It's as though she's intentionally rubbing out the line demarcating the great conflict of his soul, blurring the broken bits of him together into a messy but united whole.'

and

'You are so lame.'