These are very, very good. They fit the story well.

Excellent! You hve a talent with words! And portray thesetwo villians well!

hi i heard about you from darkfangirl and i must amite she was right you have lovely pomes. i know you like spelling thing but i can't do tha ok for the first pomen i like the imangery but you could expand on the word choise some in both of them. nice ryme in the 2nd but you left a sentance hanging with

"Mr. V likes to wear four raven skull rings

Mr. C would never wear something so uncouth that once had wings"

in less the names were ment to be the ryme. which then changes the 'beat' of the poeam. over all i like them and hope you continue writing

I love this poem. The imagery in it is great! I don't read poems often but I really do like this one. When you get some stories out I will be able to give a lot more feedback on them. Sorry. .

Neat.