LOL. Appreciate the insertion of SoulMaka fluff. Good job so far :D.

This chapter was better than the previous two. I think you should maybe cut the paragraphs and space out the dialogues so it flows better though. :)

The chapters go kinda fast because of the length I guess, but I can tell you are building up to a major storyline :D

Interesting beginning, but maybe a little short. :)

Interesting take on Stein and Medusa. It would be better if the chapters are a wee bit longer, but it's not vital, I guess. And make a new paragraph for every new character that speaks. For instance:

"MAKA I HEAR YOU HAVE A BOYFRIEND WHY DO THEY GROW UP SO QUICKL-" Death Scythe was cut off by a single 'Direct Noggin Shinigami Chop'.
"Maka, I have a new mission for you. It has come to our attention Stein is in allegiance with Medusa and has been ordered by her to obtain a demon tool being transported from Florence, Italy to Arachne's domain on New Year's. Your job is to prevent Stein from obtaining the demon tool and try to bring him back to his senses. My son, along with his weapons, will be following the transport and infiltrating Arachne's castle. This is a dangerous mission, so if you wish to pass up the opportunity I will understand" Shinigami spelled it out pretty well. So Stein was a traitor now?
"I will do it, Shinigami-sama." Maka accepted the mission. She had to bring him back to his senses before he lost himself completely.
"Thank you, Maka. Also, please bring Soul. There's a high chance he'll respond badly and attack. And also, be careful." And with that, Maka left.

I hope you understand that comics and novels are very different styles of writing and reading.

Connection? Where? O.o *looks around* this chappie is really nice you know, i like it a lot! Soul and Maka are just lovely people and unfortunately unlovingly peeped. Haha... Do I make sense? Maybe its the happiness in my head XD

I really like it. I hope this develops into a full-out novella... Keep up the good work.

I want to be your beta! :D truth is, your story have potential, but maybe the chapters are little too short, and ur dialogues all jumbled up together. So, if you're interested just reply me eh? :D i wonder what will happen to stein soon under the effect of medusa..